Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with a reason. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things; instead, I prefer to understand the information deeply, which helps me remember better.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use a direct response followed by a supporting detail. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: I don't think I have ever forgotten anything important because I usually make notes to help me remember.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples of what you need to remember daily.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks like attending meetings, completing assignments, and buying groceries.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and difficult to understand. Use complete sentences and explain your method clearly with linking words to connect ideas.

例: To remember important things, I make a to-do list and plan my day carefully. Then, I stay focused and try to complete as many tasks as possible.

× I believe I'm not that that good at memorizing things, rather I tried to understand.

✓ I believe I'm not that good at memorizing things; rather, I try to understand.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'rather' without proper punctuation and mixes tenses. 'Rather' is used to contrast ideas and should be preceded by a semicolon or period. Also, 'tried' should be 'try' to maintain present tense consistency with 'I believe'.

× And then? No nut.

✓ And then? No, not really.

The phrase 'No nut' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. The corrected phrase 'No, not really' is a common response to a question, making the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× As far as far as my memory, 'cause I don't think I have forgotten something important.

✓ As far as I remember, I don't think I have forgotten anything important.

The phrase 'As far as far as my memory' is redundant and incorrect. The correct expression is 'As far as I remember'. Also, 'something important' is better replaced with 'anything important' in negative sentences.

× The tanks I need to remember in Martin life. Candy.

✓ The things I need to remember in my daily life. Thank you.

'Tanks' is a misspelling of 'things'. 'Martin life' is likely a mishearing of 'daily life'. 'Candy' seems out of context and is replaced with 'Thank you' as a polite ending. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× To remember important things I tried to make. A to do list formatively activities, plan my taste and stay on it. Stay focused and tried to accomplish as many else. Thanks I could.

✓ To remember important things, I try to make a to-do list for my activities, plan my tasks, and stay on it. I stay focused and try to accomplish as many as I can. Thank you.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain multiple errors. 'Tried' is changed to 'try' to maintain present tense. 'Formatively activities' is corrected to 'for my activities'. 'Plan my taste' is corrected to 'plan my tasks'. 'As many else' is corrected to 'as many as I can'. The sentences are combined and punctuated properly for clarity and grammatical correctness.