Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，导致内容难以理解。建议你使用简单且正确的句子结构，避免拼写错误，并且围绕主题展开，提供具体例子。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I can quickly remember important dates and vocabulary words, which helps me a lot when learning a new language.

提案: 回答较为简单且有语法错误，建议你直接回答问题，并用连词连接句子，提供更具体的细节。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, especially when I have many tasks to handle. For example, I sometimes forget to bring my ID card when I go out.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，建议你用完整的句子表达观点，并且提供具体且相关的细节。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember many things. For example, I have to bring my ID card when I go to the library. Also, since I am about to graduate, I need to remember the deadlines for submitting my assignments.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但语法和表达仍需改进。建议你使用连词使句子更连贯，并且用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Usually, I remember important things by keeping them in my mind because I have a good memory. However, when I have many tasks to handle at once, I write them down to help me remember better.

× I can quickly remember important datas.

✓ I can quickly remember important data.

“data”是不可数名词，不需要加复数形式“s”。

× Or Will Cavaleri words.

✓ Or vocabulary words.

原句结构混乱，可能想表达“词汇”，应使用“vocabulary words”。

× Which helps me a lot Were not in your language.

✓ Which helps me a lot when they are not in your language.

句子缺少连词和主语，导致结构不完整，应补充“when they are”。

× Disability makes studying more. Efficient under enjoying above.

✓ Disability makes studying more efficient and enjoyable.

句子断裂且用词不当，应调整为完整且通顺的表达。

× especially when there are a lot of things should be dealt with together.

✓ especially when there are a lot of things that should be dealt with together.

缺少关系代词“that”，导致句子结构不完整。

× Such as green my ID card when I go out.

✓ Such as forgetting my ID card when I go out.

“green”用错，应使用动名词“forgetting”表示动作。

× when I go to library, I need to bring my ID card.

✓ when I go to the library, I need to bring my ID card.

“library”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指。

× And now I'm pretty powerful my. Graduation, so I needed to remember when I should. Submeter.

✓ And now I'm preparing for my graduation, so I need to remember when I should submit.

句子断裂且用词错误，“powerful”应为“preparing”，“submeter”应为“submit”。

× if there are a lot of things should handle at the same time, I sometimes use to write them down to enforce my memory.

✓ if there are a lot of things that should be handled at the same time, I sometimes write them down to reinforce my memory.

缺少关系代词“that”，动词形式错误，应使用被动语态“be handled”，且“use to write”错误，应直接用“write”，“enforce”用错，应为“reinforce”。