Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and somewhat repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: My favorite machine at home is my coffee maker because it allows me to start my day with a fresh cup of coffee conveniently, saving me time and money compared to buying coffee outside.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are essential nowadays because many people have busy schedules. These machines save time and effort by automating household chores, allowing us to focus on other important tasks.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and contains repetition. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure your answer is complete. Add linking words to improve flow and provide a clear example.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions when using a machine for the first time because it helps prevent damage. For example, when I bought my new coffee maker, I carefully read the manual to learn how to operate it properly.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your thoughts and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important, especially for machines with many features like washing machines. This helps users understand how to use each function effectively and avoid mistakes.

× My favorite machine in my home is my coffee maker because I love starting my day with a cup of coffee and it is very convenient to make my own coffee at home without having to go outside and spend way more than I have to if I make my coffee at home.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is my coffee maker because I love starting my day with a cup of coffee, and it is very convenient to make my own coffee at home without having to go outside and spend way more than necessary.

The original sentence is too long and contains redundancy, making it difficult to follow. Breaking it into clearer parts and removing repeated phrases improves clarity and flow.

× Washing machines and sweeping machines can help us do our share of work without having.

✓ Washing machines and sweeping machines can help us do our share of work without much effort.

The sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. Adding a proper ending completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× For instance, when I bought my when I bought my new coffee maker, I read the manual to understand how to operate the machine and.

✓ For instance, when I bought my new coffee maker, I read the manual to understand how to operate the machine.

The sentence contains repetition ('when I bought my when I bought my') and ends abruptly with 'and'. Removing the repeated phrase and the incomplete ending corrects the sentence.

× By reading the instructions carefully, you can learn how to operate each function and how to optimize each function to.

✓ By reading the instructions carefully, you can learn how to operate each function and how to optimize each function effectively.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'to' and lacks completion. Adding 'effectively' completes the sentence and clarifies the intended meaning.