Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "stone corner" instead of "cornerstone" and "in a daily basis" instead of "on a daily basis." Try to use more natural expressions and correct prepositions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to connect your ideas logically.

例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it is the cornerstone of my kitchen. I use it several times a day; for example, in the morning, I take milk from it for my coffee, and then I get ingredients to prepare my breakfast. I also store fresh fruits in it to keep them fresh longer.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains several errors and irrelevant words like "stupidness, Lee" and "swimming machines" instead of "sweeping machines." Focus on answering the question directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid unnecessary or confusing words. Also, provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion, and use linking words to organize your ideas.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in our daily lives. They save time and effort, especially for working women, by making household chores easier and more efficient.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "I need to be read" instead of "I need to read." Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Also, explain why reading instructions is important with specific details and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I always read the instruction manual before using any machine. For example, when I first used my microwave, I read the manual carefully because there were no clear instructions on the microwave itself.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases like "before approved operating." Use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, provide more specific reasons why reading instructions is important, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any equipment at home or work. This helps me understand how to operate the machine properly, know the functions of different buttons, and learn the recommended usage time to avoid damage.

× My favorite machine is the refrigerator because it is the stone corner of my kitchens.

✓ My favorite machine is the refrigerator because it is the stone corner of my kitchen.

The word 'kitchens' is plural, but the context suggests a single kitchen. Using the singular 'kitchen' is correct here to match the intended meaning.

× I use it in a daily basis and many times in a day.

✓ I use it on a daily basis and many times a day.

The correct preposition with 'daily basis' is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'many times a day' is the correct phrase without 'in'.

× Firstly, in the morning time I open it to pick a milk for my coffee and after that I pick some ingredients from the refrigerator to prepare my breakfast.

✓ Firstly, in the morning I open it to get milk for my coffee and after that I take some ingredients from the refrigerator to prepare my breakfast.

The phrase 'pick a milk' is incorrect; 'get milk' or 'take milk' is appropriate. Also, 'in the morning time' is better as 'in the morning' for natural expression.

× I also store my fruits in.

✓ I also store my fruits in it.

The sentence is incomplete; the preposition 'in' requires an object. Adding 'it' clarifies that fruits are stored in the refrigerator.

× Yeah, stupidness, Lee.

✓ Yeah, seriously.

The phrase 'stupidness, Lee' is incorrect and unclear. Possibly a mishearing or mispronunciation. Replacing it with 'seriously' makes the sentence meaningful and appropriate.

× I think washing machine and swimming machines are very important in these days in our daily lives for the house, house shows.

✓ I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important these days in our daily lives for the house, house chores.

'Washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping machines'. Also, 'swimming machines' is likely a mispronunciation of 'sweeping machines'. 'House shows' is incorrect; 'house chores' is appropriate.

× It's a place, a vital role and it also makes their life more easier for the working woman.

✓ They play a vital role and also make life easier for working women.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it clarifies the subject and verb agreement and improves meaning.

× Yes, obviously I need to be read the manual book before to start using any machine.

✓ Yes, obviously I need to read the manual before starting to use any machine.

The phrase 'need to be read' is incorrect; it should be 'need to read'. Also, 'before to start' is incorrect; 'before starting' is correct.

× For example, when I started to use my microwave, I need to be read it because there is nothing mentioned proper on the top of microwave.

✓ For example, when I started to use my microwave, I needed to read it because nothing was properly mentioned on the top of the microwave.

'Need to be read it' is incorrect; it should be 'needed to read it'. Also, 'mentioned proper' should be 'properly mentioned'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'microwave'.

× Yes, obviously we always did.

✓ Yes, obviously we always do.

The adverb 'always' suggests a habitual action, which requires present tense 'do' rather than past tense 'did'.

× I always read the instruction before before approved operating any equipment at my home or at my workplace.

✓ I always read the instructions before operating any equipment at my home or workplace.

'Before approved operating' is incorrect; it should be 'before operating'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.

× It helps me to understand the operations and buttons and the limit how long we can use it.

✓ It helps me understand the operations, buttons, and the time limit for how long we can use it.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.