Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Avoid repetition like "it take it take" and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details within 4-5 sentences.

例: My favourite machine at home is the microwave because it cooks food quickly, saving me a lot of time. For example, I can prepare meals in just a few minutes, which is very convenient during busy days.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'haptic schedule' (likely meant 'hectic schedule'). Try to give specific reasons why these machines are important.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because nowadays people have busy schedules. Therefore, these machines help save time and effort in household chores.

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs better grammar and clarity. Avoid repetition like 'how how' and improve sentence flow using linking words such as 'because' and 'so'. Also, try to be more specific about why reading instructions is helpful.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because sometimes I am busy and unfamiliar with its operation. Reading the instructions helps me understand how to use the machine safely and effectively.

提案: Your answer conveys the idea but has grammatical errors and repetition. Use clearer sentences and avoid repeating words like 'easily'. Also, explain why reading instructions is important with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I believe it is important to read instructions because they guide us on how to use equipment properly and avoid mistakes or accidents.

× In my home there are so many machines like microwave, washing machine, refrigerator and so on.

✓ In my home there are so many machines like microwaves, washing machines, refrigerators and so on.

The nouns 'microwave', 'washing machine', and 'refrigerator' are countable and refer to multiple items, so they should be in plural form to agree with 'so many machines'.

× But I like most microwave for a cooking purpose because it take it take less time.

✓ But I like the microwave most for cooking purposes because it takes less time.

The verb 'take' must agree with the singular subject 'microwave', so it should be 'takes'. Also, 'like most microwave' is incorrect; it should be 'like the microwave most'. 'A cooking purpose' is better expressed as 'cooking purposes'.

× But I like most microwave for a cooking purpose because it take it take less time.

✓ But I like the microwave most for cooking purposes because it takes less time.

The preposition 'for' before 'a cooking purpose' is unnecessary; 'for cooking purposes' is the correct phrase. Also, 'a cooking purpose' is not idiomatic; 'cooking purposes' is preferred.

× That is very time saving that's why.

✓ That is very time-saving; that's why.

The phrase 'time saving' should be hyphenated as 'time-saving' when used as an adjective. Also, the sentence is a fragment and should be connected properly with a semicolon or rephrased.

× In the modern era today youngster using these so many electronic techniques.

✓ In the modern era today, youngsters use so many electronic devices.

The verb 'using' is incorrect here; the sentence requires the present simple tense 'use' to agree with the plural subject 'youngsters'. Also, 'youngster' should be plural 'youngsters'. 'Electronic techniques' is better expressed as 'electronic devices'.

× So according to me these two machines are important in today life because all are busy in a haptic schedule, they have no time to work with in with their hand so.

✓ So according to me, these two machines are important in today's life because everyone is busy in a hectic schedule; they have no time to work with their hands.

'Today life' should be 'today's life' (possessive). 'All' is vague; 'everyone' is better. 'Haptic schedule' is incorrect; it should be 'hectic schedule'. 'Work with in with their hand' is incorrect; it should be 'work with their hands'.

× So according to me these two machines are important in today life because all are busy in a haptic schedule, they have no time to work with in with their hand so.

✓ So according to me, these two machines are important in today's life because everyone is busy in a hectic schedule; they don't have time to work with their hands.

The phrase 'they have no time to work with in with their hand so' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'don't have time' is clearer and more natural. Also, 'work with their hands' is the correct phrase.

× Of course yes, I read all instructions before using a machine because sometime we are busy in a hectic schedule and we don't know how how they process.

✓ Of course, yes, I read all instructions before using a machine because sometimes we are busy in a hectic schedule and we don't know how they work.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'How they process' is incorrect; it should be 'how they work' or 'how they operate'.

× So firstly I start with introduction and what are the main information about these machine then we using.

✓ So firstly, I start with the introduction and the main information about these machines, then we use them.

'Introduction' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Main information' is uncountable and should be preceded by 'the'. 'These machine' should be 'these machines' (plural). 'We using' is incorrect; it should be 'we use'.

× So firstly I start with introduction and what are the main information about these machine then we using.

✓ So firstly, I start with the introduction and the main information about these machines, then we use them.

'Information' is uncountable and should be preceded by 'the' to specify it. 'These machine' should be plural 'these machines' to agree with 'these'.

× Well, according to me it is important to read the instructions because with the help of these guidelines we easily easily catch up the easily deal with these type of equipments.

✓ Well, according to me, it is important to read the instructions because with the help of these guidelines, we can easily deal with these types of equipment.

The phrase 'catch up the easily deal with' is incorrect and redundant. Using 'can easily deal with' is correct. 'These type of equipments' should be 'these types of equipment' because 'equipment' is uncountable and 'types' should be plural.