Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more coherent by using correct sentence structures and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like the air conditioner, and add a specific detail or example.

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it helps me stay cool during hot summers when temperatures reach 36 degrees. I usually keep it on all day, especially when I am studying. It makes me feel comfortable and relaxed while lying on my bed.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and lacks clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your sentences. Also, try to be more specific about how these machines help families. Avoid vague phrases and ensure your answer is grammatically correct.

例: I think the importance of washing and sweeping machines depends on the family size. For example, if I live alone, I might not need them because they can be expensive and unnecessary. However, for a family of four or five, these machines are very useful as they reduce the amount of housework significantly.

提案: Your answer is informal and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and formally. Use linking words to organise your answer logically. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

例: Usually, I do not read the instructions because I find it boring and prefer to try using the machine directly. For instance, once I bought earphones but forgot how to use them, and I realised I should have read the instructions. Since then, I understand the importance of reading manuals.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective. Be specific about why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read instructions before using a new machine. This helps to avoid mistakes and ensures that the machine is used correctly. Now, I always read the manual to understand how the technology works before I start using it.

× My favorite machine is air conditioner.

✓ My favorite machine is the air conditioner.

In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. 'Air conditioner' is a singular countable noun, so it needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item in the home.

× Without it I can survive under a hot summer where temperature is reached to 36°.

✓ Without it I cannot survive a hot summer when the temperature reaches 36°.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is reached to' which is not correct. The verb 'reach' should be in the present simple form 'reaches' to describe a general fact. Also, 'under a hot summer' is incorrect; 'a hot summer' is sufficient.

× I open in line 24/7.

✓ I keep it on 24/7.

The phrase 'I open in line 24/7' is unclear and incorrect. The correct expression is 'keep it on 24/7' to indicate the air conditioner runs all the time.

× I usually all the time like when I was studying.

✓ I usually use it all the time, like when I was studying.

The adverbs 'usually' and 'all the time' are misplaced. The correct placement is 'usually use it all the time' to express frequency properly.

× I'm just lying on the bed.

✓ I just lie on the bed.

The present continuous 'I'm just lying' is less appropriate here; the simple present 'I just lie' better fits the habitual action described.

× I think it depends on family for me, like when I live alone, I wouldn't need to a washing machine or a sweeping machine because it's too expensive for one person to use.

✓ I think it depends on the family. For me, when I live alone, I wouldn't need a washing machine or a sweeping machine because they're too expensive for one person to use.

The phrase 'depends on family' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'need to a washing machine' is incorrect; it should be 'need a washing machine'. The plural pronoun 'they're' matches the plural machines.

× But for a family, like for four to five people in the family, they definitely some of them like can reduce housework, reduce the.

✓ But for a family of four to five people, some of these machines can definitely reduce housework.

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. It needs restructuring to clearly express that some machines help reduce housework.

× Not really, I'm too lazy to see the content and I just try to use it.

✓ Not really, I'm too lazy to read the instructions and I just try to use it.

'See the content' is not the correct phrase for reading instructions. 'Read the instructions' is the appropriate expression.

× One time I buy a earphone and I forgot how to use it and I want to find the instruction.

✓ One time I bought earphones and forgot how to use them, so I wanted to find the instructions.

The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to match the past context. 'A earphone' is incorrect; 'earphones' is more natural. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.

× I suddenly thinking about that I just throw it off.

✓ I suddenly thought about that and just threw it away.

The verb 'thinking' should be past tense 'thought' to match the past narrative. 'Throw it off' is incorrect; 'threw it away' is the correct phrasal verb.

× So it's terrible experiment.

✓ So it was a terrible experience.

'Terrible experiment' is incorrect in this context; 'terrible experience' is the correct phrase. Also, past tense 'was' fits the narrative.

× We need to read it.

✓ We need to read them.

Referring to 'instructions' which is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× Definitely, as I say, we share reading instruction.

✓ Definitely, as I said, we should share reading instructions.

'Share reading instruction' is unclear; 'share reading instructions' is better. Also, 'as I say' should be past tense 'as I said' to refer to previous statement.

× We often made a wrong mistake on how to using a new machine.

✓ We often make mistakes about how to use a new machine.

'Made a wrong mistake' is redundant; 'make mistakes' is correct. 'On how to using' is incorrect; it should be 'about how to use'.

× So right now I always read the instruction before I use some new technology.

✓ So right now I always read the instructions before I use new technology.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× I think it is very important to get to know how the machine is work and after use it.

✓ I think it is very important to understand how the machine works and how to use it afterwards.

'Is work' is incorrect; it should be 'works'. 'After use it' is ungrammatical; 'how to use it afterwards' is correct.