Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite formal and uses advanced vocabulary, which is good, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding one or two specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. For example, it quickly cleans clothes without the need for manual scrubbing, which used to be very tiring.

提案: Your answer shows strong opinion but contains some unclear or incorrect words (e.g., 'pandrous' likely meant 'arduous'). Also, avoid rhetorical questions and focus on clear, natural language. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are very important because they make household chores much easier and faster. For instance, using a vacuum cleaner saves a lot of time compared to sweeping by hand.

提案: Your answer starts well but ends abruptly and is incomplete, which affects clarity. Also, avoid sentence fragments and ensure your ideas are fully expressed. Use linking words to connect your points logically and provide specific examples.

例: It depends on the machine. If I have used a similar device before, I usually don't read the instructions. However, for new or complicated machines, I read the manual or watch online tutorials to avoid mistakes.

提案: Your answer is clear and balanced, but the last sentence could be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to use linking words to contrast ideas smoothly and provide a concise conclusion.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because it helps avoid errors and accidents. However, sometimes instructions are too complicated, so many people prefer to learn by trying the machine themselves.

× Due to technological advances, our lives become far more convenient and efficient in terms of time management.

✓ Due to technological advances, our lives have become far more convenient and efficient in terms of time management.

The sentence describes a change that has occurred over time up to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have become' is appropriate rather than the simple present 'become'. This tense indicates the ongoing relevance of the change.

× Washing machine and sweeping machines have transformed this task from exhausting, time consuming labor into quick and effortless routines.

✓ Washing machines and sweeping machines have transformed this task from exhausting, time consuming labor into quick and effortless routines.

The subject refers to more than one type of machine, so both 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machines' should be plural to maintain parallel structure and correct subject agreement.

× Perhaps only those who romanticize the past without truly realizing how pandrous and laborious such shows used to be.

✓ Perhaps only those who romanticize the past without truly realizing how arduous and laborious such chores used to be.

The word 'pandrous' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'arduous'. Also, 'shows' is incorrect in context; 'chores' fits the meaning better. This correction improves word choice and clarity.

× That said, I often turn to online tutorials for nuance tips and troubleshooting advice, However, in many instances particularly to avoid.

✓ That said, I often turn to online tutorials for nuanced tips and troubleshooting advice. However, in many instances, particularly to avoid mistakes, I do not consult instructions.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains punctuation errors. 'Nuance tips' should be 'nuanced tips'. The sentence is clarified and completed to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× letting many people to learn more effectively through hands on experience rather than reading.

✓ letting many people learn more effectively through hands-on experience rather than reading.

The verb 'let' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Also, 'hands on' should be hyphenated as 'hands-on' when used as an adjective.