Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and filler words like 'umm'.

例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it helps me save time and money. For example, I can prepare different types of food in advance, freeze them, and store large amounts of groceries, especially on weekends.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid filler words. Begin with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they make our lives easier. Since we have busy schedules, these machines save us time by completing tasks quickly and efficiently.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine. The manual helps me understand how to operate it properly and troubleshoot any problems that may arise.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide specific reasons why reading instructions is important, avoiding vague or incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine. For instance, some machines like mixers have time limits for safe use, and reading the instructions helps prevent damage or accidents.

× In my home is my favorite machine is the refrigerator because it helps me to save my time.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the refrigerator because it helps me save time.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced elements causing confusion. The phrase 'In my home is my favorite machine is' is incorrect. The correct structure places the subject first, followed by the verb and complement. Also, 'helps me to save my time' is better as 'helps me save time' for natural English.

× I can prepare umm a different type of foods, I can freeze them in freezer and I also can buy a big amount of grocery and can store in refrigerator help me to save my time and money at the weekend.

✓ I can prepare different types of food, freeze them in the freezer, and also buy a large amount of groceries to store in the refrigerator, which helps me save time and money on the weekend.

'A different type of foods' is incorrect because 'foods' is plural and 'a' indicates singular. It should be 'different types of food'. 'Big amount of grocery' should be 'large amount of groceries' because 'groceries' is countable plural. Also, missing articles like 'the freezer' and 'the refrigerator' are needed. The sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× Uh, yes, to be honestly, umm, I'm sleeping and washing machine has become a, uh, important part in our life is makes, uh, our life is more easier than the past time because we can, we have a hectic schedule and we can save our time and the machines can do in a few minutes.

✓ Uh, yes, to be honest, washing and sweeping machines have become important parts of our lives. They make our lives easier than in the past because we have hectic schedules and can save time as the machines do tasks in a few minutes.

'To be honestly' should be 'to be honest'. 'I'm sleeping and washing machine' is incorrect; likely meant 'washing and sweeping machines'. 'Is makes' is incorrect; should be 'make'. 'More easier' is incorrect; 'easier' alone suffices. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. Also, 'our life is more easier than the past time' should be 'our lives easier than in the past'.

× Of course I do before the starting any equipment.

✓ Of course I do before starting any equipment.

The phrase 'before the starting any equipment' is incorrect because 'starting' is a gerund and does not need 'the' before it. The correct form is 'before starting any equipment'.

× I take advantage of manual book because it's helped me to help me to direct how we can operate the machine and if there is any problem I can easily solve and how long we can.

✓ I take advantage of the manual book because it helps me understand how to operate the machine, and if there is any problem, I can easily solve it and know how long we can use it.

'Manual book' needs the definite article 'the'. 'It's helped me to help me to direct' is awkward and incorrect; 'it helps me understand' is better. The sentence is incomplete and unclear at the end; adding 'know how long we can use it' clarifies meaning. Also, 'solve' needs an object 'it'.

× Yes, definitely we should be always read the instruction before start.

✓ Yes, definitely we should always read the instructions before starting.

The modal verb phrase 'should be always read' is incorrect; it should be 'should always read'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and 'before start' should be 'before starting'.

× The any machine is a very important.

✓ Any machine is very important.

'The any machine' is incorrect; 'any machine' is correct. Also, 'a very important' is incomplete; it should be 'very important' or 'a very important machine'.

× Sometimes it gives the instruction.

✓ Sometimes it gives instructions.

'The instruction' is too specific and unnatural here; 'instructions' plural is more appropriate. Also, the sentence is short and can be clearer without 'the'.

× We can't use the more than that time, especially about talk about a mixer.

✓ We can't use it for more than the specified time, especially when talking about a mixer.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'We can't use the more than that time' is incorrect; it should be 'use it for more than the specified time'. 'Especially about talk about a mixer' is awkward; 'especially when talking about a mixer' is correct.

× This is the mostly mentioned we can't start it more than.

✓ This is mostly mentioned: we can't start it more than once.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'This is the mostly mentioned' should be 'This is mostly mentioned' or 'This is often mentioned'. 'We can't start it more than' needs an object or number, e.g., 'more than once'.