Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your favourite machine and explaining why, using correct grammar and linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite machine at home is the coffee machine. My sister gave it to me as a birthday gift for my 24th birthday because she knows I love coffee. I use it every morning to make fresh coffee, which helps me start my day well.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for me because I prefer to wash and sweep things myself. I believe that cleaning by hand is more thorough than using machines.

提案: Your answer is generally good but has some grammatical errors and an incomplete ending. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Of course, I always read the instructions carefully before using any machine because I want to avoid damaging them. Since I am not experienced with operating machines, reading the instructions helps me use them safely and correctly, which prevents any problems.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid ending with a question tag unless appropriate. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine because it helps avoid damage and ensures that the machine is used safely and effectively.

× As a coffee lover, my favorite machine is coffee machine and the coffee machine is brought my my by my sister because I love coffee and she gave me a birthday gift for me. 24th years old birthday gift and.

✓ As a coffee lover, my favorite machine is the coffee machine and the coffee machine was brought to me by my sister because I love coffee and she gave me a birthday gift. It was for my 24th birthday.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'coffee machine' which is necessary to specify the particular machine. Also, 'brought my my by my sister' is incorrect; it should be 'was brought to me by my sister' to use the correct passive voice and preposition. '24th years old birthday gift and.' is incomplete and awkward; it should be rephrased as 'It was for my 24th birthday.' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× As a coffee lover, my favorite machine is coffee machine and the coffee machine is brought my my by my sister because I love coffee and she gave me a birthday gift for me. 24th years old birthday gift and.

✓ As a coffee lover, my favorite machine is the coffee machine and the coffee machine was brought to me by my sister because I love coffee and she gave me a birthday gift. It was for my 24th birthday.

The verb 'brought' is the past participle and should be used with the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the passive voice correctly. The original sentence misses the auxiliary verb and has incorrect word order, making it ungrammatical.

× I think they're not important because I always wash it and sweep it straight things by myself.

✓ I think they're not important because I always wash and sweep things myself.

The phrase 'wash it and sweep it straight things' is incorrect. 'It' is singular but refers to plural 'machines'. Also, 'straight things' is unclear and unnecessary. The corrected sentence removes 'it' and 'straight' to correctly refer to plural objects and improve clarity.

× I think they're not important because I always wash it and sweep it straight things by myself.

✓ I think they're not important because I always wash and sweep things myself.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to multiple machines ('washing machines and sweeping machines'). The pronoun should agree in number with its antecedent. Removing 'it' and using 'things' or simply omitting the pronoun improves grammatical correctness.

× I think a human wash will more clearly clearly than machine.

✓ I think a human wash is clearer than a machine's.

The adverb 'clearly clearly' is repeated and incorrect here. The comparative form 'clearer' should be used as an adjective to compare the quality of washing. Also, 'machine' should be possessive 'machine's' to indicate the washing done by the machine.

× the coffee machine is brought my my by my sister

✓ the coffee machine was brought to me by my sister

The preposition 'to' is necessary after 'brought' to indicate the recipient of the action. The original sentence omits 'to' and has a repeated word 'my' which is incorrect.

× she gave me a birthday gift for me.

✓ she gave me a birthday gift.

The phrase 'for me' is redundant after 'gave me'. The verb 'gave' is correctly in past tense, but the sentence is clearer and more natural without the redundant prepositional phrase.

× And since I am not experienced with operating machines, reading the instructions help me use them safely and correctly.

✓ And since I am not experienced with operating machines, reading the instructions helps me use them safely and correctly.

The subject 'reading the instructions' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number. The original sentence uses 'help' which is incorrect subject-verb agreement.

× This way I can provide any problems and.

✓ This way I can avoid any problems.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Provide any problems and.' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely to avoid problems, so the corrected sentence reflects that clearly and grammatically.