Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并注意语法和句子完整性。可以多用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it helps me stay cool during the hot summer. Without it, the high temperatures would be unbearable. Therefore, I consider it the most important machine in my house.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子不完整。建议回答时结构完整，表达清楚，使用连接词使内容连贯，并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and effort. Doing housework manually can be tiring both physically and mentally, so these machines make daily chores much easier.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，且句子不完整。建议简洁明了地回答问题，注意语法和句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: No, I rarely read the instructions before using a machine because I find that most machines operate in a similar way. Usually, I can figure out how to use them just by trying.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复表达，且句子不够流畅。建议避免重复，注意语法正确，表达清晰，并用连接词使内容连贯。

例: I don't think it's very important to read the instructions because I can usually use machines easily without them. Moreover, most machines are designed to be safe, so not reading the instructions rarely causes any problems.

× I suppose it should be the air conditioner or it'll help me to survive, to go through the crucial summer, you know, the hot temperature, we could kill me.

✓ I suppose it should be the air conditioner because it'll help me survive and get through the crucial summer, you know, the hot temperature could kill me.

这里'should be the air conditioner or it'll help me'中的'or'连接不当，且'the hot temperature, we could kill me'中'temperature'是单数，后面用复数形式'we'不合适，应改为单数形式。建议将'or'改为'because'，并调整句子结构使其更通顺。

× And thanks to the AC, it is the greatest machine in the.

✓ And thanks to the AC, it is the greatest machine in the house.

句子末尾缺少必要的名词，导致句子不完整。应补充完整的名词短语，使句子完整通顺。

× Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

✓ Do you think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important?

'sweeping machines'用词不准确，通常应使用'vacuum cleaners'表示吸尘器。这里属于词汇使用问题，虽然不完全是语法错误，但影响表达准确性。

× Yes, definitely. It is quite convenient and can save all time and energy.

✓ Yes, definitely. They are quite convenient and can save a lot of time and energy.

前文提到的是复数'washing machines and sweeping machines'，后文应使用复数代词'they'，而不是单数'it'。另外，'all time'应改为'a lot of time'表示大量时间。

× Oh, I don't know why, you know, doing some housework chaos is not very difficult, but it's quite exhausting, not only for the physical condition, but also for the mental condition, So I was.

✓ Oh, I don't know why, you know, doing some housework chaos is not very difficult, but it's quite exhausting, not only physically but also mentally, so I was tired.

句子结构混乱，'doing some housework chaos'表达不清，应改为'doing some housework'；'not only for the physical condition, but also for the mental condition'表达不自然，应改为'not only physically but also mentally'；句尾'So I was.'不完整，应补充完整。

× Knows I rarely do that I think.

✓ No, I rarely do that, I think.

'Knows'应为否定回答'No'，且句子缺少逗号分隔，导致表达不清。应改为'No, I rarely do that, I think.'。

× after I handled the machine it seems like I could use the. I could use them immediately 'cause I think the the the method of using them are quite similar between the different machines so.

✓ After I handled the machine, it seems like I could use it immediately because I think the method of using them is quite similar between different machines.

'the machine'是单数，后面不应用复数代词'them'，应统一为单数'it'。'method of using them are'中主语是单数'method'，谓语应为'is'。句子中多余的'the'应删除。

× Well, I don't think so. For me, even I don't read the instructions, I could use these machines immediately and fluently.

✓ Well, I don't think so. For me, even if I don't read the instructions, I can use these machines immediately and fluently.

'even I don't read'缺少连词，应为'even if I don't read'。另外，'could'表示过去或假设，语境应使用现在时态'can'。

× Oh, besides, I think this machine are quite safe, are quite safe.

✓ Oh, besides, I think these machines are quite safe.

'this machine are'主谓不一致，'this machine'是单数，谓语应为'is'；如果用'are'，主语应为复数'these machines'。重复'are quite safe'应删除。

× So even people don't read the instructions, they couldn't bring some dangerous risk.

✓ So even if people don't read the instructions, they won't bring any dangerous risk.

'couldn't bring some dangerous risk'表达不当，'couldn't'表示不能，语境应为'不会带来危险'，应使用'won't bring any dangerous risk'。