Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，有重复和冗余，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更地道的表达方式。

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time washing clothes. Thanks to it, I have more free time to spend with my family. It's truly a great invention.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达观点，并避免重复和不完整的句子。

例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important because they save time and effort. This allows people to relax and spend more quality time with their families.

提案: 回答中语法和用词不准确，建议注意时态和冠词的使用，表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it correctly, avoid mistakes, and save time.

提案: 回答冗长且重复，语法错误较多，建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用恰当的连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important because they provide useful tips to avoid mistakes and help you operate machines more efficiently, saving time.

× I need to spend much of time every day to washing clothes.

✓ I need to spend much time every day washing clothes.

动词spend后面应直接跟动名词形式，不能用不定式to washing，正确用法是spend time doing something。

× I need to spend much of time every day to washing clothes.

✓ I need to spend much time every day washing clothes.

much of time用法错误，正确表达是much time，表示大量时间。

× And now with it, it could save much time for me and then I could have enough time to spend with my family.

✓ And now with it, I can save much time and then have enough time to spend with my family.

句中it指代不明确且重复，且表达更自然应使用第一人称I。

× It's very great invention.

✓ It's a great invention.

very great不符合英语习惯，great本身表示程度，前面不加very，且缺少冠词a。

× Yes, of course both of them can save, can free people's hand and have enough time to relax to spend with their families, and then also could save them much of efforts to relax in front of the business.

✓ Yes, of course both of them can save and free people's hands, giving them enough time to relax and spend with their families, and also save them much effort from work.

people's hand应为复数hands，且表达不清晰，business用词不当，应为work或job。

× both of them can save, can free people's hand

✓ both of them can save, can free people's hands

hand应为复数hands，因为people是复数，手也应为复数。

× have enough time to relax to spend with their families

✓ have enough time to relax and spend time with their families

to relax to spend结构不正确，应使用and连接两个动词短语。

× could save them much of efforts to relax in front of the business.

✓ could save them much effort from work.

efforts不可数时不加of，in front of the business表达不当，应改为from work。

× I'd like to read instructions before using machine because from my point of view this could help me to more familiar with the machines, avoid the error operations and also could save a time and wait.

✓ I'd like to read the instructions before using a machine because from my point of view this could help me become more familiar with the machines, avoid errors in operation, and also save time and waiting.

instructions前应加定冠词the，machine前应加不定冠词a，表达more familiar后应接动词不定式become，error operations表达不当，应为errors in operation，a time用法错误，time不可数。

× help me to more familiar with the machines

✓ help me become more familiar with the machines

help后接动词不定式时to可省略，且more familiar后应接be动词，正确表达为help me become more familiar。

× also could save a time and wait.

✓ also could save time and waiting.

time不可数，前面不加冠词a，wait用作名词时应为waiting。

× I think it is very useful and important to read instructions which gives you many tips that you could take it to avoid many mistakes and also will make your operations more efficiently and also could save you much time and avoid mistakes you were made.

✓ I think it is very useful and important to read instructions which give you many tips that you can use to avoid many mistakes, make your operations more efficient, save you much time, and avoid mistakes you have made.

instructions为复数，谓语动词应为give；tips后不应用take it，应为use；efficient为形容词，修饰动词应用副词efficiently改为efficient；you were made表达错误，应为you have made。

× make your operations more efficiently

✓ make your operations more efficient

efficient是形容词，修饰名词operations，副词efficiently用法错误。

× avoid mistakes you were made.

✓ avoid mistakes you have made.

此处应使用现在完成时have made，表示过去发生且对现在有影响的动作，were made为被动语态，语义不符。