Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢洗衣机的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇表达感受。

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it cleans my clothes thoroughly and makes them smell fresh. I enjoy wearing clean clothes as it boosts my confidence.

提案: 回答中表达了观点，但语法和用词不准确，句子不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意语法正确性。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they reduce the amount of manual labor we need to do. This allows us to save time and focus on more important tasks.

提案: 回答内容完整，但句子较长且重复，表达不够简洁。建议分句表达，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me avoid mistakes, such as pressing the wrong buttons, which could damage my clothes.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，且有重复内容。建议简化句子，避免口语填充词，使用准确表达。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important. Without them, we might press the wrong buttons and damage our clothes instead of cleaning them.

× I like the washing clothes machine best because it can wash our clothes, makes it clean and smells good and I really like to wear.

✓ I like the washing machine best because it can wash our clothes, make them clean and smell good, and I really like to wear them.

这里“washing clothes machine”应改为“washing machine”，因为“washing machine”是正确的短语。动词“makes”应改为“make”，因为主语是复数“clothes”。“smells good”应改为“smell good”，同样因为主语是复数。最后“I really like to wear”后面应加宾语“them”，指代衣服。

× A good smile, clothes, it makes me feel enjoyful.

✓ Good-smelling clothes make me feel happy.

“A good smile, clothes”结构混乱，且“enjoyful”用法不当，应使用“happy”或“pleased”。句子应简洁表达衣服的气味让人愉快。

× As the machines they helped human a lot and decreased the labor that human needs to do.

✓ As machines, they help humans a lot and decrease the labor that humans need to do.

“machines”是复数，谓语动词应用复数形式“help”。“human”应改为复数“humans”，表示人类。

× As the machines they helped human a lot and decreased the labor that human needs to do.

✓ As machines, they help humans a lot and decrease the labor that humans need to do.

这里描述的是一般事实，应使用一般现在时而非过去时。

× It's really a significant development cause the time we say we can go to do something important.

✓ It's really a significant development because it saves us time so we can do something important.

“cause”应为“because”，且“the time we say”表达不清，应改为“it saves us time”。“go to do”结构不自然，应简化为“do”。

× Yes I do and I think it is important to read the instructions because if you don't know how to use the machine, you may use it wrongly and maybe you choose the wrong button and you may use use the machine to break your clothes.

✓ Yes, I do, and I think it is important to read the instructions because if you don't know how to use the machine, you may use it incorrectly, choose the wrong button, and damage your clothes.

“use it wrongly”应改为“use it incorrectly”，更符合英语习惯。重复“use”应删除。表达“break your clothes”不准确，应改为“damage your clothes”。

× Yes I do and I think it is important to read the instructions because if you don't know how to use the machine, you may use it wrongly and maybe you choose the wrong button and you may use use the machine to break your clothes.

✓ Yes, I do, and I think it is important to read the instructions because if you don't know how to use the machine, you may use it wrongly, choose the wrong button, and damage your clothes.

句子中“maybe you choose”应改为“you may choose”，保持语法一致。

× Yes I do. If we don't read the instructions we may use the machines mistakenly.

✓ Yes, I do. If we don't read the instructions, we may use the machines incorrectly.

“use the machines mistakenly”表达不自然，应改为“use the machines incorrectly”。

× For example umm I we may choose the wrong button and maybe we will use the washing machine to scratch a clothes and instead of washing it clean and refresh.

✓ For example, we may choose the wrong button and use the washing machine to scratch clothes instead of washing them clean and fresh.

“a clothes”错误，clothes是复数名词，不用冠词。应改为“scratch clothes”。“refresh”应改为“fresh”，形容词形式。