Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复和冗余。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it keeps me cool during the hot summer. It helps us feel comfortable and prevents us from feeling too hot.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，表达混乱，缺乏具体细节和逻辑连接词。建议明确表达观点，使用连接词，并提供具体原因或例子。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us a lot of time and effort. For example, washing machines clean clothes quickly, and sweeping machines help keep the house tidy, which reduces stress.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用更准确的词汇和句型，表达清晰且连贯。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it is important to avoid mistakes that could damage it. Reading instructions also helps me understand how the machine works better.

提案: 回答表达重复且不够流畅。建议避免重复，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明阅读说明书的重要性。

例: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important because they explain how to use the machine safely and effectively. This helps prevent problems and makes the machine more useful.

× Let me see it can be so air conditioner it bring me cool grease when in the summer.

✓ Let me see, it can be the air conditioner; it brings me cool breeze in the summer.

原句中 'bring' 应使用第三人称单数形式 'brings'，且 'grease' 应为 'breeze'，表示凉爽的风。

× It's just helped us a lot or we will be felt so burnt in the summer weather.

✓ It has helped us a lot, or we would feel very burnt in the summer weather.

原句中 'will be felt' 用法错误，应使用虚拟语气 'would feel' 表示假设。

× Yes, it will release our stress in the daily life so much for example washing machine it's just clicks about 75% of time off and the sleeping machine release our stress of.

✓ Yes, it will release a lot of our stress in daily life. For example, the washing machine is used about 75% of the time, and the sweeping machine releases our stress.

原句中 'so much' 用法不当，应改为 'a lot of'；'clicks about 75% of time off' 表达不清，改为 'is used about 75% of the time'。

× Yes, the staff is quite significant or you may operate wrongly to cause damages before using the machine.

✓ Yes, the instructions are quite significant, or you may operate wrongly and cause damage before using the machine.

原句中 'staff' 用词错误，应为 'instructions'；'cause damages' 中 'damages' 应为不可数名词 'damage'。

× I will read the instructions carefully knowing its knowledge and it's just broaden my horizon.

✓ I will read the instructions carefully to understand the knowledge, and it will broaden my horizon.

原句中 'knowing its knowledge' 结构不正确，应改为 'to understand the knowledge'；'it's just broaden' 应为 'it will broaden'。

× The instructions teach can teach you how to operate and why the machine can help you.

✓ The instructions can teach you how to operate and why the machine can help you.

原句中 'teach can teach' 重复，应去掉一个 'teach'。

× So as long as you read the instructions you can be helped most.

✓ So as long as you read the instructions, you can be helped the most.

原句中 'helped most' 应为 'helped the most'，需要加定冠词 'the'。