Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'sleep' and 'helps', you could say: "My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it keeps the house cool and fresh during hot weather, which is essential for a good night's sleep in summer."

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it keeps the house cool and fresh during hot weather, which is essential for a good night's sleep in summer.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and contains hesitations. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your points. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'. For example: "Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save us time on chores, allowing us to spend more quality time with family and friends."

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save us time on chores, allowing us to spend more quality time with family and friends.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to connect your points logically. For example: "Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me follow the correct steps, operate it safely, and prevent any damage."

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me follow the correct steps, operate it safely, and prevent any damage.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repeated phrases and incomplete thoughts. Focus on giving a clear, concise response with proper sentence structure. For example: "Yes, reading instructions is important because it helps prevent damage and ensures safe operation of machines."

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because it helps prevent damage and ensures safe operation of machines.

× Air conditioner is the most favorite machine in my house because as we know there is a hot weather outside, so it helps to keep our house weather cool and fresh and it's really important to sleep well in summer.

✓ The air conditioner is the most favourite machine in my house because, as we know, the weather outside is hot, so it helps to keep our house cool and fresh, and it's really important to sleep well in summer.

The noun 'air conditioner' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific item in the house. Also, 'a hot weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Instead, 'the weather' or simply 'weather' is appropriate. Additionally, the phrase 'house weather' is awkward; it should be 'house cool and fresh' to describe the condition inside the house.

× Yes, washing machine and sweeping machines are really important in two day life because it helps us to save our time from doing this kind of stuff.

✓ Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are really important in daily life because they help us save time from doing this kind of stuff.

The phrase 'washing machine and sweeping machines' mixes singular and plural inconsistently; both should be plural to match the context. Also, 'two day life' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'daily life'. The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural subject 'washing machines and sweeping machines'.

× Rather, uh, we can spend our TI uh, time with our family and friends.

✓ Instead, we can spend our time with our family and friends.

The word 'Rather' is not the best choice here; 'Instead' is more appropriate to indicate an alternative. Also, 'TI uh' appears to be a filler or typo and should be removed for clarity.

× Moreover, it helps to do work more easily than by doing it, and it's really difficult to, to doing this kind of stuff so.

✓ Moreover, it helps us do work more easily than doing it manually, and it's really difficult to do this kind of stuff.

The phrase 'to doing' is incorrect; after 'to' we use the base form of the verb, so it should be 'to do'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and should be simplified for clarity.

× Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helped me to follow the correct steps and always help to, uh, keep the machine safe from any damage.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me follow the correct steps and always helps keep the machine safe from any damage.

The verb 'helped' is in the past tense, which is inconsistent with the present habitual action indicated by 'always'. It should be 'helps' to match the present tense. Also, 'help to keep' can be simplified to 'helps keep'.

× So we need to always understand the uh, we always need to understand how to operate the machine properly and savour time and prevent any damage.

✓ So we always need to understand how to operate the machine properly, save time, and prevent any damage.

The sentence is repetitive and contains filler words like 'uh'. Also, 'savour time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'save time'. The pronoun usage is acceptable but the sentence structure needs improvement for clarity.

× Yes, it is really important to read the instructions because it because it help us to prevent from any damage or doing any wrong in wrong operations.

✓ Yes, it is really important to read the instructions because it helps us prevent any damage or mistakes in operation.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'prevent from any damage' is incorrect; 'prevent any damage' is correct. Also, 'doing any wrong in wrong operations' is awkward and should be simplified to 'mistakes in operation'.

× So always help it. So always follow the correct steps and operate the machine safely and to doing this California this California to doing.

✓ So it always helps. Therefore, always follow the correct steps and operate the machine safely.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'to doing this California this California to doing'. These should be removed. 'So always help it' is incorrect; it should be 'So it always helps'. The conjunctions should be used properly to connect ideas clearly.