Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然流畅，表达不清晰，语法和用词有误。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner. I didn't think much about it before, but recently, due to the increase in heat waves, it has become a necessity. It helps me stay cool and comfortable during hot days.

提案: 回答内容较简单，表达不够连贯，存在语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and energy. For example, after a busy day, these machines help people clean the house easily without much effort.

提案: 回答较长且结构不清晰，语法错误较多。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词。

例: It depends, but usually I don't read the instructions because the machines are user-friendly. I can figure out how to use them by looking at the screen or trying them out.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议明确回答问题，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they explain how to use the machine properly and what it can or cannot do. This helps avoid mistakes and damage.

× I just didn't think this so before.

✓ I just didn't think so before.

这里的 'this' 用法不当，应该用 'so' 来表达之前没有这样想过。'this' 是指示代词，句中不合适。

× But as a frequency of extreme heavy waves is quite increased this year that I think it's very, it's a necessity that equipped it with, Yeah.

✓ But as the frequency of extreme heavy waves has quite increased this year, I think it's very necessary to have it equipped, yeah.

'as a frequency' 应为 'as the frequency'，因为特指今年的频率；'is quite increased' 应用现在完成时 'has quite increased'；'it's a necessity that equipped it with' 结构不正确，应改为 'it's very necessary to have it equipped'。

× Uh, I think it's very important because it can help people who don't like to homework.

✓ Uh, I think it's very important because it can help people who don't like to do homework.

'like to homework' 缺少动词 'do'，'homework' 是不可数名词，需用动词 'do' 来表达做作业。

× Just save time and energy.

✓ It just saves time and energy.

句子缺少主语，且时态应与上下文一致，使用第三人称单数 'saves'。

× We don't need to just clean the empty house with the force after a busy day.

✓ We don't need to just clean the empty house with force after a busy day.

'with the force' 中 'the' 不必要，应去掉。

× It depends, but most of the time I don't read the instructions because the machines that notice the design is very user friendly for us and usually I can figure out how to use and go with my guts or even look at the screen.

✓ It depends, but most of the time I don't read the instructions because the machines' design is very user-friendly for us, and usually I can figure out how to use them by going with my gut or even looking at the screen.

句子结构混乱，'machines that notice the design' 不通顺，应改为 'machines' design'；'go with my guts' 应为 'go with my gut'；动词形式需统一。

× Uh, uh, yeah, it's sure.

✓ Uh, uh, yeah, sure.

'it's sure' 用法不当，口语中直接用 'sure' 更自然。

× And the menu can give us the definition of the machine and tells us about the detailed information about what it can do and cannot do.

✓ And the manual can give us the definition of the machine and tell us detailed information about what it can and cannot do.

'menu' 应为 'manual'（说明书）；'tells' 应与前面动词保持一致用原形 'tell'；'detailed information' 前不需要 'the'。

× Also for the chairs and tables, the packaged machines.

✓ Also, for the chairs and tables, the packaged machines.

句子不完整，缺少谓语，建议加逗号使其成为附加说明。