Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的地方，比如“before we boiled it”应为“before we bought it”，“confliction”应为“conflict”。建议你注意时态和词汇的准确使用，同时回答应更简洁自然，避免冗长。

例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher. Before we bought it, one of us had to wash the dishes every night, which was boring. Now, the dishwasher saves time and reduces family conflicts.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，如“most greatest”应为“greatest”，“save”应为“save”，句子结构混乱。建议你使用正确的语法结构，表达更清晰，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and make housework easier. They also help reduce family conflicts by sharing the workload.

提案: 回答中有重复词和表达不准确的问题，如“I I”，“it can walk”应为“it can work”。建议你注意发音和用词准确，句子结构应更自然流畅。

例: I usually don't read the instructions because most machines are similar and easy to use. Usually, you just need to press a button to start them.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法错误，如“may out of work”应为“may stop working”，“some attention on the instruction”应为“some important points in the instructions”。建议你注意语法和用词准确，表达更自然。

例: Undoubtedly, reading instructions is important. Sometimes machines stop working, and the instructions can help solve problems. Also, instructions include safety tips, like keeping machines away from children and fire.

× because before we boiled it, every night, we should randomly select one person among three of us to wash the dish, which is a very boring entire movement.

✓ because before we had it, every night, we would randomly select one person among the three of us to wash the dishes, which was a very boring and tedious task.

这里“boiled”用错了，应该用过去完成时“had”表示过去某个时间之前的状态；“should randomly select”改为“would randomly select”更符合过去习惯动作；“dish”应为复数“dishes”；“entire movement”表达不准确，改为“tedious task”更合适。

× we should randomly select one person among three of us to wash the dish

✓ we should randomly select one person among the three of us to wash the dishes

“three of us”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指；“dish”应为复数“dishes”，因为洗的是多于一件的碗碟。

× which is a very boring entire movement

✓ which was a very boring and tedious task

“entire movement”表达不自然，应改为“tedious task”表示“乏味的任务”；同时时态应与前文一致用过去时“was”。

× And now with the dish washing machine, it reduces our family confliction and strengthen the relationship.

✓ And now with the dishwashing machine, it reduces our family conflicts and strengthens our relationships.

“confliction”用词错误，应为复数“conflicts”；“strengthen”应加第三人称单数形式“strengthens”；“relationship”应为复数“relationships”，表示家庭成员间的关系。

× it reduces our family confliction and strengthen the relationship.

✓ it reduces our family conflicts and strengthens our relationships.

主语是第三人称单数“it”，谓语动词应加-s，故“strengthen”改为“strengthens”。

× It must definitely the most greatest invention in the 21st century because it save people time and free people from the label and it is also efficiency and will be clean that people do the housework by their hand and it also reduce the family conflict.

✓ It must definitely be the greatest invention in the 21st century because it saves people time and frees people from the labor, and it is also efficient and will clean what people do by hand, and it also reduces family conflict.

“must definitely the most greatest”缺少动词，应加“be”，且“most greatest”重复比较级，应改为“greatest”；“save”应为第三人称单数“saves”；“free people from the label”应为“free people from the labor（劳动）”；“efficiency”应为形容词“efficient”；“will be clean that people do the housework by their hand”表达不通顺，改为“will clean what people do by hand”；“reduce”应为“reduces”，与主语一致。

× because it save people time and free people from the label

✓ because it saves people time and frees people from the labor

主语是第三人称单数“it”，谓语动词应加-s，故“save”改为“saves”，“free”改为“frees”。

× free people from the label

✓ free people from the labor

“label”标签与语境不符，应为“labor”劳动，表示解放人们的劳动。

× and it is also efficiency and will be clean that people do the housework by their hand

✓ and it is also efficient and will clean what people do by hand

“efficiency”是名词，应改为形容词“efficient”；“will be clean that people do the housework by their hand”表达不通顺，改为“will clean what people do by hand”。

× and it also reduce the family conflict.

✓ and it also reduces family conflict.

主语“it”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，故“reduce”改为“reduces”。

× I I don't read instruction before using a machine.

✓ I don't read instructions before using a machine.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，表示说明书的内容。

× and since to the designer the instruction is always very simple

✓ and since to the designer the instructions are always very simple

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，且谓语动词应与复数主语一致用“are”。

× and since to the designer the instruction is always very simple, just like push the button on the top, it can walk.

✓ and since to the designer the instructions are always very simple, just like pushing the button on the top, it can work.

“push”应改为动名词“pushing”作状语；“walk”用词错误，应为“work”，表示机器能工作。

× Sometimes the machine may out of work and you need to find the solution for the instruction.

✓ Sometimes the machine may be out of order and you need to find the solution in the instructions.

“out of work”表达不准确，应为“out of order”表示机器坏了；“solution for the instruction”应为“solution in the instructions”，表示在说明书中寻找解决方法。

× And there are also some attention on the instruction you need to focus on, like keep the machine away from the children or the fire.

✓ And there are also some points in the instructions you need to focus on, like keeping the machine away from children or fire.

“attention”不可数，改为“points”表示注意事项；“instruction”应为复数“instructions”；“keep”改为动名词“keeping”作宾语。