Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition of 'also' and making sentences more concise and natural. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' effectively and correct small grammar mistakes such as 'from me anywhere' to 'anywhere with me'.

例: My favourite machine at home is my laptop because I use it for freelancing work and entertainment, such as watching TV series and keeping up with daily news. Moreover, it is very portable, so I can take it anywhere and use it conveniently.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'while' properly and avoid ending with 'So.' without completing the thought. Also, try to be more concise and clear.

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort. While these machines work automatically after we start them, we can do other tasks simultaneously, which makes household chores more efficient.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by avoiding repeating 'because' and making sentences smoother. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas and check plural forms like 'instructions'.

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because it is important to understand how it works properly. Otherwise, not following the instructions can damage the machine, void the warranty, and cause frustration later on.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting singular/plural forms ('instructions'), avoiding repetition, and making the answer more concise. Use linking words like 'therefore' or 'so' effectively to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is very important because if you don't understand how a machine works, you might damage it or void its warranty. Therefore, it's better to learn how to operate it properly to avoid frustration later.

× Also, I use it for the entertainment, to watch movie seasons and to make myself aware of the Daily News.

✓ Also, I use it for entertainment, to watch movie series and to keep myself aware of the Daily News.

The phrase 'for the entertainment' is incorrect because 'entertainment' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the'. Also, 'movie seasons' is incorrect; the correct term is 'movie series'. The phrase 'to make myself aware' is awkward; 'to keep myself aware' or 'to stay informed' is better. This improves clarity and correctness.

× Also, it's very portable so I can take it from me anywhere I can use it.

✓ Also, it's very portable so I can take it with me anywhere I can use it.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition is 'with' in the phrase 'take it with me', which means to carry something along. Using 'from me' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I generally prefer to read instruction before using a machine because it's very important to understand how the machine works properly because if you do not follow the instruction it can damage the machine.

✓ Yes, I generally prefer to read instructions before using a machine because it's very important to understand how the machine works properly because if you do not follow the instructions it can damage the machine.

The word 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple steps or guidelines. Using the singular form here is incorrect when referring to the set of guidelines.

× Yes, I believe reading instruction is very important because if you don't know how the machine functions properly, you may damage it by trying out differently and you may void the warranty.

✓ Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because if you don't know how the machine functions properly, you may damage it by trying out differently and you may void the warranty.

Similar to the previous correction, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the set of guidelines or directions.