Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ ngữ lặp lại không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because my family is very busy. After a long day, it helps us clean our clothes quickly and saves us a lot of time. Therefore, it plays an important role in our daily life.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn, đồng thời tránh lỗi phát âm và từ sai (ví dụ: 'swapping' thay vì 'sweeping'). Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for most families in my country. Because the world is changing fast, people are busier than before. Therefore, these machines help save a lot of time in daily chores.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời hoàn chỉnh câu cuối để ý nghĩa rõ ràng.

例: Absolutely yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. If I don't, I might use it incorrectly and cause damage. So, when I buy something new, I make sure to read the manual carefully to avoid any problems.

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu cuối, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn, đồng thời tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I think it is very important for everyone to read the instructions before using any machine. If you don't understand how it works, you might face problems. Therefore, reading the instructions helps ensure safe and proper use.

× So the machine machine have a lot in my daily life.

✓ So the machine has a lot of importance in my daily life.

The subject 'machine' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'machine machine' seems to be a repetition error. The phrase 'have a lot' is incomplete; it should be 'has a lot of importance' or similar to make sense.

× for most of family in my country

✓ for most families in my country

'Family' should be plural 'families' because 'most of' refers to a plural noun here.

× in Morden with fast changing world

✓ in the modern, fast-changing world

'Morden' is a misspelling of 'modern'. Also, 'fast changing' should be hyphenated as 'fast-changing' to correctly modify 'world'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'modern'.

× most of family are busier than in the past

✓ most families are busier than in the past

'Family' should be plural 'families' to agree with 'most'.

× so it can have they save time.

✓ so it can help them save time.

Incorrect phrase 'have they save time' should be corrected to 'help them save time' for proper meaning and grammar.

× if I don't read the instruction

✓ if I don't read the instructions

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it usually refers to multiple steps or guidelines.

× I will maybe make it broken

✓ I might break it

The phrase 'make it broken' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'break it'. Also, 'maybe' should be placed before the verb as 'might' or 'may'.

× when I buy something new I usually read the instruction first

✓ when I buy something new I usually read the instructions first

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps.

× to ensure that it will correct and don't make.

✓ to ensure that it is correct and doesn't cause problems.

'Will correct' is incorrect; it should be 'is correct'. Also, 'don't make' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'doesn't cause problems' or similar.

× it is really important for everyone to read the instruction before using another machine

✓ it is really important for everyone to read the instructions before using any machine

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. Also, 'another machine' is better as 'any machine' for general advice.

× if you don't really understand how the machine work

✓ if you don't really understand how the machine works

The verb should be 'works' to agree with singular subject 'machine'.