Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and filler words. Also, use correct grammar such as 'one of the machines' instead of 'one of the machine'.

例: My favorite machine at home is the oven because I enjoy baking. I use it frequently to make cakes and bread.

提案: Improve fluency by reducing filler words and use clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I believe washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because we can sweep manually, but washing clothes without a machine is very difficult.

提案: Avoid filler sounds and improve grammar by saying 'the first time I use it'. Also, make your answer more natural and clear.

例: I always read the instructions the first time I use a machine so I can operate it correctly and safely.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use plural form 'instructions'. Also, combine your ideas more smoothly using linking words.

例: Yes, reading the instructions is important because it helps people understand how to operate the machine safely and correctly.

× The favorite machine that I like the most in my home, I would say it's oven.

✓ The favorite machine that I like the most in my home, I would say it's the oven.

The noun 'oven' is singular and countable, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular machine being referred to.

× So oven is one of the machine that I use the most in my home, Yeah.

✓ So the oven is one of the machines that I use the most in my home, yeah.

The phrase 'one of the machine' is incorrect because 'one of the' should be followed by a plural noun. 'Machine' should be pluralized to 'machines' and 'oven' should have the definite article 'the'.

× I personally think washing machine is more important than sweeping machines because umm, without sweeping machine we can use this by manually, we can sweep manually by person, but without washing machine is really a hard job for everyone.

✓ I personally think the washing machine is more important than sweeping machines because, umm, without a sweeping machine we can do this manually; we can sweep manually by person, but without a washing machine it is really a hard job for everyone.

Countable singular nouns like 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' require articles ('the' or 'a'). Also, 'without washing machine' is incorrect; it should be 'without a washing machine'. This clarifies the meaning and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I personally think washing machine is more important than sweeping machines because umm, without sweeping machine we can use this by manually, we can sweep manually by person, but without washing machine is really a hard job for everyone.

✓ I personally think the washing machine is more important than sweeping machines because, umm, without a sweeping machine we can do this manually; we can sweep manually by person, but without a washing machine it is really a hard job for everyone.

The phrase 'use this by manually' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'do this manually' because 'manually' is an adverb modifying the verb 'do'. Also, 'by person' is awkward; it would be better to say 'by a person' or 'manually' alone.

× I will read the instruction before using a machine when that is my first time use it.

✓ I will read the instructions before using a machine when it is my first time using it.

'Instruction' should be pluralized to 'instructions' because it usually refers to multiple steps or guidelines. Also, 'when that is my first time use it' is incorrect; it should be 'when it is my first time using it' to maintain proper tense and structure.

× I will read the instruction before using a machine when that is my first time use it.

✓ I will read the instructions before using a machine when it is my first time using it.

The verb 'use' should be in the '-ing' form 'using' after 'first time' to correctly express the action.

× Yes, I think it is important to read the instruction before using the machine.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions before using the machine.

'Instruction' should be pluralized to 'instructions' because it generally refers to multiple steps or guidelines.