Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh những cụm từ không phù hợp như "convenient to watch and don't be safe". Hãy tập trung vào việc trình bày ý chính một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves time and effort for my family. This allows us to focus more on our studies and work without distractions.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn còn lủng củng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến người nghe khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh những câu hỏi không cần thiết như "So that is very convenient at how?". Hãy cố gắng sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help me save time and effort on household chores, allowing me to focus more on my studies.

提案: Bạn có ý tốt khi nhấn mạnh việc đọc hướng dẫn, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ ngữ không phù hợp như "it is very insignificant" (ý bạn có thể là "significant"). Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác để truyền đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn.

例: Definitely yes. Even though the instructions can be long, I always read them carefully so that I can understand how to use the machine properly and operate it easily.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "a very significant" (thiếu danh từ theo sau), "create conveniently in our work household tours" không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, chính xác và từ vựng phù hợp để làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine because it helps us operate the machine correctly and avoid mistakes, making our household work easier and safer.

× My favorite machine at home is washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine at home is the washing machine.

The noun 'washing machine' is a singular, countable noun and requires a definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item known to both speaker and listener.

× It helps me and my parents saving time and saving effort so we can focus more on study and work with no distraction because it is convenient to watch and don't be safe.

✓ It helps me and my parents save time and effort so we can focus more on studying and working without distraction because it is convenient and safe.

After 'helps', the verb should be in base form 'save' not '-ing' form. Also, 'focus more on study and work' should be 'focus more on studying and working' to use gerunds after preposition 'on'. The phrase 'with no distraction' is better as 'without distraction'. 'It is convenient to watch and don't be safe' is unclear; corrected to 'it is convenient and safe' for clarity.

× I usually use washing machines and sweeping machines to help me in household chores because I need to concentrate more on my study and it help me time saving and save my effort.

✓ I usually use washing machines and sweeping machines to help me with household chores because I need to concentrate more on my studies and they help me save time and effort.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural subject 'washing machines and sweeping machines'. 'Help me time saving' is incorrect; it should be 'help me save time'. 'My study' should be plural 'my studies'.

× So that is very convenient at how?

✓ So that is very convenient, isn't it?

The phrase 'at how' is incorrect and unclear. A common tag question 'isn't it?' fits the context better to confirm the statement.

× Although the instructions were long, I always read the instructions before I using a machine because I think it is very insignificant so that I can know how to use this machine and how to control it conveniently and easily for me.

✓ Although the instructions are long, I always read the instructions before using a machine because I think it is very significant so that I can know how to use this machine and how to control it conveniently and easily for me.

The tense should be present 'are' to match 'always read'. 'Before I using' is incorrect; it should be 'before using'. 'Insignificant' is the opposite of intended meaning; 'significant' is correct.

× Well, to be honest, I think it's a very significant to read the instructions before we use any machines because it can help us understand how to operate the machine properly and avoid many mistakes, making it easier, safer to us, so it can create conveniently in our work household tours.

✓ Well, to be honest, I think it's very important to read the instructions before we use any machines because it can help us understand how to operate the machine properly and avoid many mistakes, making it easier and safer for us, so it can create convenience in our household chores.

'Significant' should be replaced with 'important' for natural expression. 'Safer to us' should be 'safer for us'. 'Create conveniently' is incorrect; 'create convenience' is correct. 'Work household tours' is unclear; corrected to 'household chores'.