Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、"a automatic vacuums"は誤りで、"an automatic vacuum"が正しいです。また、"It is very comfortable in every night"は意味が不明瞭で、"It is very convenient to use every night"など具体的に表現しましょう。さらに、文をつなぐ接続詞を使い、より自然で流暢な回答を目指してください。

例: My favourite machine at home is an automatic vacuum cleaner. It cleans the floors by itself every night, which is very convenient. Because of this, I can save time and keep my house tidy effortlessly.

提案: 回答が質問の内容に十分に答えられていません。また、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的に答え、具体的な理由や例を加えて説明しましょう。接続詞を使って論理的に話すことも重要です。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us save time on household chores. For example, using these machines allows me to focus more on my work and rest better.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現がやや不自然で冗長です。"I always need instruction"よりも"I always read the instructions"の方が自然です。また、理由を明確にし、接続詞を使って文章をつなげると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine because it helps me use it correctly and avoid any problems.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、"reading instruction prevent this product from breakable"は誤りで、"reading instructions prevents the product from breaking"が正しいです。より自然で正確な表現を心がけ、接続詞を使って論理的に話しましょう。

例: Yes, I think it is essential to read the instructions because they help us understand how to use the product properly and prevent it from getting damaged.

× In my house we have a automatic vacuums.

✓ In my house we have automatic vacuums.

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'vacuums'. 'A' is used only with singular countable nouns. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× It is very comfortable in every night.

✓ It is very comfortable every night.

The phrase 'in every night' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'every night' without the preposition 'in'. This fixes the incorrect use of preposition and article.

× This vacuum work itself like automatically so.

✓ This vacuum works by itself automatically.

The subject 'vacuum' is singular, so the verb should be 'works' not 'work'. Also, 'like automatically so' is awkward; 'by itself automatically' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× In my opinion, it is very important for my lives because high quality of sleeping lead high quality working and it leads to concentrate my job.

✓ In my opinion, it is very important for my life because high quality sleep leads to high quality work and it helps me concentrate on my job.

'Lives' should be singular 'life' as it refers to the speaker's life. 'Sleeping' should be 'sleep' as a noun. 'Lead' should be 'leads' to agree with singular subject. 'Working' should be 'work' as a noun. 'Leads to concentrate' is incorrect; 'helps me concentrate on' is correct usage.

× Yes, indeed, I always need instruction before I use a new product because it is important for me to use correctly and it makes these products more accessible.

✓ Yes, indeed, I always need instructions before I use a new product because it is important for me to use it correctly and it makes these products more accessible.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it usually refers to multiple steps. 'Use correctly' needs an object 'it' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, it is essential to read the instructions because we need to understand how to use and reading instruction prevent this product from breakable.

✓ Yes, it is essential to read the instructions because we need to understand how to use it and reading instructions prevents this product from breaking.

'Reading instruction' should be plural 'reading instructions'. 'Prevent this product from breakable' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'prevents this product from breaking'. Also, 'use' needs an object 'it'.