Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, instead of 'a essay', say 'an air conditioner'. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and make your answer more structured by giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because we live in a very hot country. It helps keep the whole house cool and comfortable, especially during the summer months.

提案: Focus on using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why these machines are important.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they make household chores easier and faster. For example, washing machines save time by cleaning clothes quickly, and sweeping machines help keep the house clean with less effort.

提案: Improve clarity by using correct words and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I am not treating instructions' and 'I use chatty with'. Try to give a clear and concise answer with supporting details.

例: To be honest, I usually do not read the instructions before using a machine. However, if the machine is new or complicated, I read the instructions to understand how to use it properly.

提案: Try to avoid confusing sentences and repetition. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide clear reasons for your opinion.

例: I think reading instructions is important, especially when using a new machine. However, if you are familiar with the machine, you may not need to read them every time because you already know how to use it.

× My favorite machine is a essay because we are in a hot country and we need always AC and all house.

✓ My favorite machine is an AC because we are in a hot country and we always need AC in the whole house.

The word 'essay' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'AC' (air conditioner). Also, 'a essay' is incorrect because 'essay' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'an essay' if it were correct. Additionally, 'all house' should be 'the whole house' to correctly express the meaning. The plural form 'AC' is treated as singular here because it refers to the machine.

× we need always AC and all house.

✓ we always need AC in the whole house.

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the verb 'need' for correct word order. Also, 'all house' is incorrect; it should be 'the whole house' to specify the entire house.

× Of course, of course they are important because they easy and comfortable and it's have a lot of qualities that help human to speed the process, Yeah.

✓ Of course, of course they are important because they are easy and comfortable and they have a lot of qualities that help humans to speed up the process, yeah.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'they' to agree with the plural subject. Also, 'it's have' is incorrect; it should be 'they have' to match the plural subject 'they'. 'Human' should be plural 'humans' to refer generally to people. 'Speed the process' should be 'speed up the process' for correct phrasal verb usage.

× it's have a lot of qualities that help human to speed the process

✓ they have a lot of qualities that help humans to speed up the process

'It's' is a contraction for 'it is' which does not agree with the plural subject. The correct pronoun is 'they' for plural. 'Human' should be plural 'humans' to refer to people in general. Also, 'speed the process' should be 'speed up the process' to use the correct phrasal verb.

× I am not treating instructions, but sometimes I I saw I read it because it's important when I have the faculty to understand something.

✓ I am not reading instructions, but sometimes I do read them because it's important when I have the ability to understand something.

'Treating instructions' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'reading instructions'. 'I saw I read it' is unclear and likely a mistake; it should be 'I do read them'. 'Faculty' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'ability'. Also, 'instructions' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× I use chatty with.

✓ I use chatty with.

This sentence is unclear and incomplete; it is difficult to correct without more context. Possibly the student meant 'I use chatty apps' or 'I use chatty features'. Without further context, no correction is possible.

× sometimes when you are familiar with the machine, you don't know.

✓ sometimes when you are familiar with the machine, you don't need to know.

The phrase 'you don't know' is incomplete or incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is likely 'you don't need to know' or 'you don't need to read the instructions'.

× You don't have to read the instruction because you have the ability to to do it without the instruction, but it's very important.

✓ You don't have to read the instructions because you have the ability to do it without them, but it's still very important.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. The phrase 'to to do it' has a repeated 'to'. Also, 'without the instruction' should be 'without them' to refer back to 'instructions'. The sentence is improved by adding 'still' to emphasize importance.