Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，比如“my girl's machine”应为“my favourite machine”，句子结构不完整且有重复。建议简化句子结构，直接表达喜欢烤箱的原因，并补充具体细节。

例: My favourite machine at home is the oven. I have loved baking bread since I was a child, so I often use the oven to make delicious homemade bread and pastries.

提案: 回答中存在发音和用词错误，如“ivory locks”应为“washing and sweeping machines”，句子不连贯且重复。建议使用清晰的句子结构，准确表达观点，并使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us save time and reduce the amount of housework we need to do.

提案: 回答基本清楚，但有重复和语法错误，如“watch the watch the instructions”。建议避免重复，使用更自然的表达，并补充更多细节。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. For example, when I buy a new clock, I carefully read how to set the time to avoid mistakes.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，如“buy”应为“bought”，且表达不够流畅。建议注意时态一致，简洁表达经历，并说明原因。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important. When I was a child, I bought a clock but didn't read the instructions carefully, so I set it up incorrectly and it broke after some time.

× My girl's machine in my home is an oven.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is an oven.

这里的表达不清楚，'girl's machine'不符合语境，应该表达“我最喜欢的机器”，且machine是单数，符合语境。

× Well, when I was a child I really like to bake some bread and I always use this often to bake it.

✓ Well, when I was a child I really liked to bake some bread and I always used this oven to bake it.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时态，like和use应改为liked和used。

× So this often accompany with me for a long time and a lot of delicious spreads are made from from it.

✓ So this oven often accompanied me for a long time and a lot of delicious breads were made with it.

'this often accompany with me'结构错误，应该是主语+动词过去式+宾语，且'with'用法不当，改为'accompanied me'。另外，'spreads'不符合语境，改为'breads'更合适。

× Uh, ivory locks is too kind of machines because I think with the help of these two machines, we can have more, the more time to do the things that we would like to do And, uh, these two machines can reduce our housework time.

✓ Uh, ivory locks are two kinds of machines because I think with the help of these two machines, we can have more time to do the things that we would like to do. And, uh, these two machines can reduce our housework time.

'is'应改为'are'以匹配复数主语，'too kind'应为'two kinds'，'the more time'重复，应简化为'more time'。

× Yes, I do. And I also think it is very important because for example when we buy a new clock, we need to watch the watch the instructions about how to use it and how to adjust the time.

✓ Yes, I do. And I also think it is very important because, for example, when we buy a new clock, we need to read the instructions about how to use it and how to adjust the time.

'watch the watch the instructions'重复且用词错误，应为'read the instructions'。

× I think the instructions are very important when before using a machine.

✓ I think the instructions are very important before using a machine.

'when before'重复，且'when'在此处多余，应去掉。

× Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because when I was a child I buy a clock, but that time I didn't raise the instructions carefully, so I just set up the time.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because when I was a child I bought a clock, but at that time I didn't read the instructions carefully, so I just set the time.

描述过去事件，buy应改为bought，'didn't raise'错误，应为'didn't read'，'set up the time'应简化为'set the time'。

× But after a long time trying I found that the clock was broken.

✓ But after trying for a long time, I found that the clock was broken.

'after a long time trying'语序不当，应改为'after trying for a long time'，使表达更自然。