Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'free food machine'.

例: My favourite machine at home is the AC induction cooking system because I enjoy cooking in my free time. It heats food quickly and is very efficient, which makes preparing meals enjoyable.

提案: Focus on clear comparisons and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct vocabulary: 'sweeping machines' instead of 'whipping machines'.

例: I think washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because washing clothes by hand is difficult, especially when there are many. Sweeping can be done manually more easily.

提案: Try to speak more fluently and avoid hesitation sounds like 'umm'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Usually, I don't read instructions if the machine is easy to use. However, when I buy a new machine from Amazon or IKEA, I always read the instructions carefully to understand how to use it properly.

提案: Make your answer more structured and clear. Use linking words and avoid repetition. Provide specific examples with correct grammar.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because they provide useful information. For example, with a washing machine, you need to add detergent before putting in the clothes. Similarly, the AC induction cooking system has specific settings that I need to understand.

× My free food machine in my home is the AC induction cooking system because I love eating so I always when I have free time I always make food for by myself and and make some.

✓ My favourite machine in my home is the AC induction cooking system because I love eating, so whenever I have free time, I always make food by myself.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect use of 'for by myself' and repeated 'and'. The phrase 'make food for by myself' is incorrect; it should be 'make food by myself'. Also, 'always when I have free time' is better expressed as 'whenever I have free time'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I think washing machine is important than the whipping machines because whipping machines is is not really difficult to do it like for a washing machine.

✓ I think the washing machine is more important than the sweeping machines because sweeping machines are not really difficult to use like a washing machine.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'washing machine' needs 'the' and 'is' should be 'are' for plural 'machines'. Also, 'whipping machines' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'sweeping machines'. The comparative 'important than' should be 'more important than'. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and proper comparative structure.

× Like you can't, you can't wash it by yourself. Like wash it 1000 umm exaggerate 1000 clothes at at the same time, right?

✓ You can't wash 1000 clothes by yourself at the same time, right?

The original sentence is repetitive and unclear. 'Wash it' is incorrect because 'it' does not refer to clothes. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and clarifies the meaning by directly referring to '1000 clothes'.

× If the machine is easy to use, I in most case I don't really read the instruction.

✓ If the machine is easy to use, in most cases I don't really read the instructions.

The phrase 'in most case' should be 'in most cases' to correctly use the plural quantifier. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps or guidelines.

× However, if it a new machine that I bought from Amazon or IKEA, I probably umm, read the machine first. I mean instruction first.

✓ However, if it is a new machine that I bought from Amazon or IKEA, I probably read the instructions first.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'if it'. Also, 'read the machine' is incorrect; it should be 'read the instructions'. The plural 'instructions' is appropriate here.

× Yes, the instruction is pretty useful because it profiles a lot of information about it.

✓ Yes, the instructions are pretty useful because they provide a lot of information about the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple guidelines. The verb should agree in number: 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'profiles' is incorrect; 'provide' is the correct verb. 'It' is ambiguous; 'they' refers to 'instructions'.

× For instance for some machine as umm the washing machine, the washing machine like you have to put detergent before you putting like dirty clothes in it and for AC induction cooking system in.

✓ For instance, for some machines like the washing machine, you have to put detergent in before putting dirty clothes in it, and for the AC induction cooking system...

The sentence has incorrect preposition use: 'put detergent before you putting' should be 'put detergent in before putting'. Also, 'some machine' should be 'some machines'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for prepositions and plural forms.