Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some redundancy and minor language errors. Try to avoid repeating ideas and focus on clear, concise sentences. Also, correct small mistakes like 'to up full to uplift' which seems unclear. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favorite machine at home is my mobile phone because it provides me with everything I need. For example, I can search for information anytime and watch entertaining videos to uplift my mood.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains unclear phrases like 'do EV every core' which affects clarity. Try to use precise vocabulary and avoid vague expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically and provide more specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are essential in modern households because many people have busy schedules and lack time for manual cleaning. For instance, these machines help save time by efficiently washing clothes and cleaning floors.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but some sentences are a bit long and could be more concise. Also, avoid filler phrases like 'to be honest' which do not add value. Use linking words to improve coherence between ideas.

例: It depends on the machine. If it's a high-tech device, I always read the instructions to avoid mistakes. However, for simple machines that I am familiar with, I usually skip the instructions.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains informal phrases like 'you know' and 'really hefty amount' which could be replaced with more formal vocabulary. Also, try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I think reading instructions is important mainly for expensive or complex machines. For simple devices, it's usually unnecessary to read the manual.

× I can watch something entertaining to up full to uplift my mood.

✓ I can watch something entertaining to uplift my mood.

The phrase 'to up full to uplift' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'to uplift' which is the infinitive verb form used to express purpose. Remove 'to up full' to correct the sentence.

× many people don't get time to physically do EV every core.

✓ many people don't get time to physically do every chore.

The phrase 'do EV every core' is incorrect. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct phrase is 'do every chore' meaning to perform household tasks. 'Chore' is the correct noun here.

× If I'm using a simple machine which I to be honest know how it will work, so I just don't read the instructions.

✓ If I'm using a simple machine which, to be honest, I know how it will work, I just don't read the instructions.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing commas. The phrase 'which I to be honest know' should be reordered to 'which, to be honest, I know' to correctly insert the parenthetical phrase. Also, the conjunction 'so' is unnecessary and breaks sentence flow.

× a machine that's already, you know, really simple to arrange.

✓ a machine that's already, you know, really simple to use.

The verb 'arrange' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is that the machine is simple to operate or use. Therefore, 'to use' is the correct prepositional phrase here.