Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it helps me wash clothes quickly and efficiently. I often use it for my clothes as well as my parents', which saves us a lot of time.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid grammatical errors. Use linking words properly to connect ideas and be specific about how these machines help in daily life.

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are important because they make household chores easier and faster. For example, they save time and reduce physical effort when cleaning the house.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using proper linking words and completing your sentences. Avoid repetition and clarify your points with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and effectively. This way, I can avoid mistakes and potential damage.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea and incomplete sentences. Use clear and complete sentences with linking words to explain why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because it helps prevent accidents and ensures the machine is used correctly. For instance, knowing safety precautions can protect users from harm.

× I think it would be our washing machine because I am fond of washing my clothes and even my mother and father's clothes.

✓ I think it would be our washing machine because I am fond of washing my clothes and even my mother’s and father’s clothes.

The original sentence incorrectly combined 'mother and father's clothes' which can cause confusion. The correction clarifies possession by using 'mother’s and father’s clothes' to indicate clothes belonging to both parents separately.

× So in order for me to make it finish right away, I will use the washing machine and it really helps me to accomplish.

✓ So in order for me to finish it right away, I will use the washing machine and it really helps me to accomplish it.

The phrase 'make it finish' is incorrect; the correct form is 'finish it'. Also, 'helps me to accomplish' needs an object, so 'it' is added for clarity.

× Yes, they are definitely important because they make your life easier, they help you with your household chores, to done it easily and to finish it on time or it's not a time consuming for you if you're doing.

✓ Yes, they are definitely important because they make your life easier; they help you with your household chores, allowing you to do them easily and finish on time, so it is not time-consuming for you when you are doing them.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun use and awkward phrasing such as 'to done it' and 'it's not a time consuming'. The correction uses proper pronouns and verb forms, and improves sentence clarity and flow.

× Yes, I would definitely read the instructions before using the machine because it will not be hard for me to use if ever I will use the machine.

✓ Yes, I definitely read the instructions before using the machine because it will not be hard for me to use it if I use the machine.

The use of 'would' and 'if ever I will use' is incorrect here. Since the question is about habitual action, simple present tense and modal verbs should be used appropriately.

× And you should read the instruction so that you will know the the pros and cons when using the.

✓ And you should read the instructions so that you will know the pros and cons when using it.

The sentence is missing the object after 'using the'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' to match common usage.

× Yes, it's very important to read the instructions in order for you not to not to encounter any danger in the future when using the machine.

✓ Yes, it's very important to read the instructions so that you do not encounter any danger in the future when using the machine.

The phrase 'in order for you not to not to encounter' is redundant and incorrect. The correction simplifies it to 'so that you do not encounter' for clarity and correctness.

× I would say that it's important to read the instructions so that you will know the.

✓ I would say that it's important to read the instructions so that you will know the details.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'details' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.