Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Para mejorar, intenta usar oraciones claras y correctas. Por ejemplo, usa vocabulario adecuado y estructura tus ideas con oraciones completas y coherentes. Evita errores gramaticales y palabras incorrectas para que tu respuesta sea más natural y efectiva.

例: My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it allows me to store food safely. It keeps food fresh for a longer time, so I can enjoy meals without worrying about spoilage.

提案: Para mejorar, enfócate en responder directamente y usar conectores para que tus ideas sean claras y lógicas. Además, usa vocabulario adecuado y evita errores para que tu respuesta sea más natural y coherente.

例: Yes, I think washing machines are very important, especially for large families because hand washing clothes takes a lot of time and effort. However, sweeping machines might be less essential compared to washing machines.

提案: Para mejorar, trata de organizar tus ideas con oraciones claras y usa vocabulario correcto. Además, evita errores de pronunciación y gramática para que tu respuesta sea más natural y efectiva.

例: I usually read the instructions of every machine I buy. For example, when I got my first cell phone, I read the manual even though it was easy to use. I believe reading instructions helps me use devices better.

提案: Para mejorar, usa oraciones completas y claras, y evita errores para que tu respuesta sea más natural. También, intenta explicar tus ideas con detalles específicos y vocabulario adecuado.

例: I think it is very important to read instructions because they help me use devices more efficiently. Also, reading instructions can prevent problems and help me understand how to operate the device correctly.

× My favorite machine at home it is a French.

✓ My favorite machine at home is a fridge.

The original sentence has a redundant subject 'it' and uses 'French' instead of 'fridge'. The correct sentence removes the unnecessary 'it' and uses the correct noun 'fridge' to refer to the machine that stores food.

× It is because you can storage your foot.

✓ It is because you can store your food.

The verb 'storage' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'store'. Also, 'foot' is a typo for 'food'. The preposition 'your' is correctly used here.

× Your foot can be now without being more wing or right, so you can have it for a specific time there.

✓ Your food can be kept fresh without going bad, so you can have it for a specific time.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect words like 'foot', 'wing', and 'right'. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning, using 'food', 'kept fresh', and 'going bad' to express the idea properly.

× Oh yes, I will think so.

✓ Oh yes, I think so.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here. The correct expression is 'I think so' to express current opinion.

× And they're more important for money, for families that have an important member, an important number of members in the family,

✓ And they're more important for many families that have a large number of members,

The phrase 'for money' is incorrect; it should be 'for many'. Also, 'an important member' is unclear and likely meant to be 'a large number of members'. The correction clarifies the meaning and fixes singular/plural issues.

× So I love watching machines.

✓ So I love washing machines.

The word 'watching' is a typo for 'washing', which is the correct term for the machine used to clean clothes.

× An probably shipping machines are less important.

✓ And probably sweeping machines are less important.

The word 'shipping' is a typo for 'sweeping', referring to machines used for cleaning floors. Also, 'An' should be 'And'.

× Oh I can't say yes.

✓ Oh, I can't say yes.

A comma is needed after 'Oh' to separate the interjection from the rest of the sentence for clarity.

× I normally ritis turn the instructions of every machine that I buy.

✓ I normally read the instructions of every machine that I buy.

The word 'ritis turn' is incorrect; it should be 'read'. The preposition 'of' is correctly used here.

× For example when I have my fill my first cell phone.

✓ For example, when I got my first cell phone.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction uses the past tense 'got' to indicate receiving the phone and adds a comma after 'For example'.

× Yes, even if it probably easy to use but in my opinion you can get better if you read instructions.

✓ Yes, even if it is probably easy to use, in my opinion you can do better if you read the instructions.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'it'. Also, 'get better' is vague; 'do better' is clearer. A comma is added before 'in my opinion' for clarity.

× I think it is very important because this helps me to use a device more efficiently, but I also believe I can understand any never did Anna boy problems by reading the instructions.

✓ I think it is very important because it helps me use a device more efficiently, and I also believe I can avoid any problems by reading the instructions.

The phrase 'this helps me' is better as 'it helps me' to refer to reading instructions. The phrase 'never did Anna boy problems' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'avoid any problems'. The conjunction 'but' is changed to 'and' for better logical flow.