Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to give a clear topic sentence, explain why the coffee machine is your favourite, and avoid unclear phrases like 'the time I make a coffee is pressured' and 'the dash on the taste'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is the coffee machine because I enjoy drinking coffee every morning. It helps me start my day with energy, and the coffee it makes tastes delicious and fresh.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear topic sentence, explain why these machines are important, and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they make household chores easier and save time. For example, washing machines clean clothes quickly, which helps us manage our daily tasks more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains mistakes such as 'asthma scene'. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and explain why reading instructions is helpful. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and efficiently. This way, I can avoid mistakes and use the machine smoothly.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear and complete sentence explaining why reading instructions is important. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions because they guide us on how to use machines properly. This helps prevent damage and ensures the machine works smoothly and conveniently.

× My favorite machine in my home is coffee machine.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the coffee machine.

The noun 'coffee machine' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific machine in the home. Omitting the article makes the sentence grammatically incorrect.

× And the dash on the taste was very delicious.

✓ And the taste was very delicious.

The phrase 'the dash on the taste' is unclear and incorrect. Removing 'the dash on' clarifies the sentence. 'Delicious' correctly describes the taste.

× Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machine or important because it is convenient for us.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they are convenient for us.

The noun 'sweeping machine' should be plural to match 'washing machines'. Also, the verb should agree with the plural subject, so 'are' is used instead of 'is'. 'Or' is a typo and should be 'are'.

× The machine help us help our lives more convenient, so I wanted to get it and.

✓ The machines help us and make our lives more convenient, so I want to get them.

'Machine' should be plural to match the context. 'Help' should be 'help' for plural subject. 'Help our lives more convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'make our lives more convenient'. 'Wanted' should be present tense 'want' to match the current desire. The sentence was incomplete and corrected accordingly.

× Yes I do. I have to read the instructions before I use asthma scene because then reading instructions help us to move this machine more convenient and smoothly, so I should. I think we should.

✓ Yes, I do. I have to read the instructions before I use a machine because reading instructions helps us to use the machine more conveniently and smoothly, so I think we should.

'Asthma scene' is likely a mishearing or typo; replaced with 'a machine'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'reading instructions'. 'Move this machine more convenient' is incorrect; corrected to 'use the machine more conveniently'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I do. I think it is important to read the instruction for us because. Instruction helped us. Help us to use mass in more smoothly and convenient, so we must read it.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it is important to read the instructions because instructions help us to use machines more smoothly and conveniently, so we must read them.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to general guidelines. 'Helped' should be present tense 'help' to match the context. 'Mass' is a typo for 'machines'. 'More smoothly and conveniently' uses correct adverb forms. The sentence was combined and corrected for clarity and grammar.