Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by simplifying sentences and avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because washing clothes is one of the most difficult tasks for me. Although all electrical appliances help with daily chores, the washing machine saves me a lot of time and effort.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe washing and sweeping machines are very important because they help us manage our time better. For example, washing clothes by hand takes a lot of time, but using a washing machine makes the task easier and frees up time for other activities.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use more natural expressions. Add linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me operate it carefully. Moreover, the instructions contain useful information and safety warnings that I need to follow to avoid any problems.

提案: Work on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to organize your ideas and explain clearly why reading instructions is important, including mentioning safety and proper usage.

例: Yes, it is very important to read the instructions because they provide detailed information about how to use the machine properly. Also, the instructions include warnings and precautions that help us avoid accidents and damage.

× It's my washing machine, even though all of my electrical appliances helped me a lot and doing daily tasks, but I like washing machine because washing his own of the most difficult task for me.

✓ It's my washing machine. All of my electrical appliances help me a lot in doing daily tasks, but I like the washing machine because washing clothes is one of the most difficult tasks for me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'even though' and 'but' together, which is redundant and confusing. Also, 'doing daily tasks' lacks a subject and verb agreement, and 'washing his own' is unclear and incorrect. The correction separates ideas into clearer sentences, uses proper conjunctions, and corrects the phrase to 'washing clothes is one of the most difficult tasks.'

× Yes, I think so, because this kind of instrument can help us to maintain our time management. Washing his own author difficult thing and which will consume more time if you are doing ourselves.

✓ Yes, I think so, because this kind of instrument can help us manage our time. Washing clothes is a difficult task and consumes more time if you do it yourself.

The phrase 'washing his own author difficult thing' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning by replacing it with 'washing clothes is a difficult task' and corrects the awkward phrasing to improve clarity and grammar.

× But if you're depending on watch mission, it will be very easy and we can save over time for other purposes.

✓ But if you depend on a washing machine, it will be very easy and we can save time for other purposes.

The phrase 'depending on watch mission' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'washing machine.' Also, 'save over time' is incorrect; it should be 'save time.' The correction fixes the pronoun usage and corrects the noun and phrase for clarity.

× Yes, of course, I'm doing that one because it is the proper way to manage that instrument very carefully.

✓ Yes, of course, I do that because it is the proper way to use that instrument carefully.

The phrase 'I'm doing that one' is awkward and incorrect in this context; 'I do that' is more appropriate. Also, 'manage that instrument very carefully' is better expressed as 'use that instrument carefully.' The correction improves preposition and verb usage for clarity.

× It's very important to read the instructions before it under.

✓ It's very important to read the instructions before using it.

The phrase 'before it under' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'before using it,' which properly uses the gerund form after the preposition 'before.'

× It contained a lot of usable information there.

✓ It contains a lot of useful information.

The verb tense should be present tense 'contains' because instructions generally have information currently. Also, 'usable' is less appropriate than 'useful' in this context. The word 'there' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× Yes, of course, because the instruction contains a lot of information regarding the usage of that instrument and the warning what we have to do unpaid, but we don't have it to do that kind of warning and precautions are there in the instruction.

✓ Yes, of course, because the instructions contain a lot of information regarding the usage of that instrument and warnings about what we have to do. We must follow these warnings and precautions that are in the instructions.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect pronouns and phrasing such as 'warning what we have to do unpaid' and 'we don't have it to do that kind of warning.' The correction clarifies the meaning, corrects pronoun usage, and improves sentence structure.

× We have to read it for the very, very helpful usage and foot avoid hams.

✓ We have to read it for very helpful usage and to avoid harm.

The phrase 'foot avoid hams' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'to avoid harm.' The correction fixes this and improves the sentence for clarity and correctness.