Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Cümlelerinizde gereksiz duraklamalar ve tekrarlar var. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı daha etkili yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanarak düşüncelerinizi daha iyi bağlayabilirsiniz.

例: My favourite machine at home is definitely my coffee machine because I have a great passion for coffee and coffee beans. It allows me to make espressos and various other types of coffee, which I really enjoy drinking.

提案: Cevabınızı daha akıcı ve doğal hale getirmek için cümlelerinizi daha iyi bağlamalısınız. Ayrıca, daha spesifik örnekler vererek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

例: Of course, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they make life much easier. For example, they save time and effort, especially for working men and women who have busy schedules.

提案: Cümlelerinizdeki duraklamaları azaltmalı ve daha akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, düşüncelerinizi bağlamak için uygun bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız.

例: When I first get a machine, I like to read all the instructions carefully. However, if I already know how to use it, I usually skip reading the instructions to save time.

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için cümlelerinizi daha iyi bağlamalısınız. Ayrıca, fikirlerinizi desteklemek için daha spesifik nedenler veya örnekler ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: I think reading instructions is important sometimes, especially when you use a machine for the first time. However, if you are already familiar with the machine, it might not be necessary to read all the instructions.

× It's definitely my coffee machine because I have a really big passion for coffee and. Coffee beans.

✓ It's definitely my coffee machine because I have a really big passion for coffee and coffee beans.

The sentence was incorrectly split by a period, causing a sentence fragment. Combining the two parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I can do espressos or different kinds of coffee when I'm. Drinking coffee.

✓ I can make espressos or different kinds of coffee when I'm drinking coffee.

The verb 'do' is less appropriate here; 'make' is the correct verb collocated with 'espressos' and 'coffee'. Also, the sentence was incorrectly split by a period, creating a fragment. Combining into one sentence corrects the structure.

× These machines. Can make your life a lot more easier than you think

✓ These machines can make your life a lot easier than you think

The phrase 'a lot more easier' is incorrect because 'easier' is already a comparative adjective. 'More' is unnecessary and redundant. Also, the sentence was incorrectly split by a period, creating a fragment.

× I think it's a great invention for working woman or working. Men.

✓ I think it's a great invention for working women or working men.

The singular 'woman' should be plural 'women' to match 'men' and the context of general groups. Also, the sentence was incorrectly split by a period, creating a fragment.

× When I first get the machine, I like to read all of the instructions.

✓ When I first get the machine, I like to read all the instructions.

The phrase 'all of the instructions' is grammatically correct but 'all the instructions' is more natural and concise in this context.

× But if I know how to use the machine, I don't like reading all of those instructions given below because I think it's kind of like. Use this time.

✓ But if I know how to use the machine, I don't like reading all of those instructions given below because I think it's kind of a waste of time.

The phrase 'kind of like. Use this time.' is a sentence fragment and unclear. Replacing it with 'kind of a waste of time' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× But when I get a. A machine for the first time.

✓ But when I get a machine for the first time,

The sentence was incorrectly split by a period, creating a fragment. Also, the article 'a' was repeated unnecessarily. Combining and correcting the article usage improves clarity.