Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural phrasing and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'a lot of problems and a lot of obstacles,' you can say 'many difficulties.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favorite machine at home is the air conditioner because we live in a dry climate. Without it, we would face many difficulties, especially during the hot summer months.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about benefits. For example, explain how washing machines save time and resources.

例: Yes, I think washing machines are very important because they save time and use water and electricity more efficiently compared to washing clothes by hand. This is why I decided to buy one.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and be concise.

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions carefully when using a new device because it helps me use it efficiently and avoid problems during its use.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clear example.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because it can save time and prevent problems while using a machine. For instance, I read the manual of my coffee maker yesterday to use it properly.

× My favorite machine is the air condition.

✓ My favorite machine is the air conditioner.

The term 'air condition' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'air conditioner'. Also, 'air conditioner' is a countable noun and should be used with the definite article 'the' if referring to a specific one. Here, 'the air conditioner' is appropriate.

× washing machines are very important device in our home

✓ washing machines are very important devices in our home

The subject 'washing machines' is plural, so the noun 'device' should also be pluralized to 'devices' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× it seemed the time

✓ it saves time

The phrase 'it seemed the time' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that the machine saves time, so the correct phrase is 'it saves time'.

× it will make our usage of water and electricity more efficient in comparing with washing by our hand

✓ it will make our usage of water and electricity more efficient compared to washing by hand

The phrase 'in comparing with' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'compared to' or 'compared with'. Also, 'washing by our hand' should be 'washing by hand'.

× an I usually read the instructions

✓ and I usually read the instructions

The word 'an' is a typo or incorrect here; it should be 'and' to connect the sentence properly.

× you will avoid a lot of obstacles and problems with during the duration

✓ you will avoid a lot of obstacles and problems during the duration

The phrase 'with during the duration' is incorrect. The preposition 'with' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× Of course being best instructions might save your time

✓ Of course, the best instructions might save your time

The phrase 'being best instructions' is incorrect. It should be 'the best instructions' to correctly use the definite article and adjective.

× it will avoid you a lot of problems during a duration of using machine

✓ it will help you avoid a lot of problems during the duration of using the machine

The phrase 'it will avoid you' is incorrect; 'avoid' is not used with a person as the object. Instead, 'help you avoid' is correct. Also, 'a duration' should be 'the duration', and 'using machine' should be 'using the machine'.

× I read a the manual of my coffee maker device.

✓ I read the manual of my coffee maker device.

The phrase 'a the manual' is incorrect; only one article should be used. Here, 'the manual' is correct because it refers to a specific manual.