Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect clarity. Try to use simple and correct sentences, and avoid redundancy. Also, complete your thoughts fully within 5 sentences. For example, clearly state your favorite machine, why you like it, and give a specific example.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I don't like washing clothes by hand. It saves me a lot of time, especially when I have a busy schedule. For instance, after a long day at work, I can quickly wash my clothes without much effort.

提案: Your answer has some vocabulary and grammar mistakes, and some unclear phrases like 'perform attacks'. Use simple, clear language and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain why these machines are important and how they help people.

例: From my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life. They help people save time and effort because they work faster and more efficiently than doing tasks by hand. Therefore, many people rely on these machines to complete household chores.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural. For example, explain why reading instructions is helpful and how it benefits you.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me understand how to operate it properly and avoid making mistakes. As a result, I can use the machine safely and efficiently.

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks supporting details. Try to give a complete answer with reasons or examples to support your opinion. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they provide important information about how to use the machine safely. For example, reading instructions can prevent accidents and help the machine last longer.

× One of my favorite missing is washing machine as I'm one of the lazy ousd person who don't prefer was seen by my hand.

✓ One of my favorite machines is the washing machine as I'm one of the lazy persons who don't prefer washing by hand.

The word 'missing' is incorrect and should be 'machines' to match the plural form. 'Washing machine' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific machine. 'Ousd person' is a misspelling and should be 'persons' to agree in plural with 'one of the lazy persons'. Also, 'was seen by my hand' is incorrect; it should be 'washing by hand'. Suggestions: Use correct plural forms and articles, and correct spelling to improve clarity.

× One of my favorite missing is washing machine as I'm one of the lazy ousd person who don't prefer was seen by my hand.

✓ One of my favorite machines is the washing machine as I'm one of the lazy persons who don't prefer washing by hand.

The phrase 'was seen by my hand' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'washing by hand'. 'Washing' is the correct present participle form to use after 'prefer'. Suggestion: Use the correct verb form 'washing' instead of 'was seen' to express the action properly.

× In such conditions, it was the machine has become one of my favorite things to wash my clothes.

✓ In such conditions, the machine has become one of my favorite things to wash my clothes.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it was the machine has become', which is a faulty structure. The correct structure is 'the machine has become'. Suggestion: Avoid combining past tense 'was' with present perfect 'has become' in the same clause.

× For instance, if I have a hectic duty schedule, then I usually.

✓ For instance, if I have a hectic duty schedule, then I usually use the washing machine.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb or action after 'I usually'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence by adding the intended action to make it meaningful.

× From my prospective, washing machine and sweeping machines are very crucial and please an important part in every workers or housewife life.

✓ From my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very crucial and an important part of every worker's or housewife's life.

'Washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping machines'. 'Prospective' is incorrect; it should be 'perspective'. 'Please' is incorrect and should be removed. 'Workers or housewife life' should be 'worker's or housewife's life' to show possession. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms, correct word choice, and possessive forms for clarity.

× As they are more faster and can perform attacks very accurately, a person's work are totally replaced by amassing nowadays.

✓ As they are faster and can perform tasks very accurately, a person's work is totally replaced by machines nowadays.

'More faster' is incorrect; 'faster' alone is sufficient. 'Attacks' is incorrect; it should be 'tasks'. 'Are' should be 'is' to agree with singular 'work'. 'Amassing' is a misspelling of 'machines'. Suggestion: Use correct comparative forms, correct vocabulary, and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I do follow the instruction prior to. Start machine because it has me to go thoroughly without any disturbance or it has me to give some directions so that I can't make any mistakes.

✓ Yes, I do follow the instructions prior to starting the machine because it helps me to go through it thoroughly without any disturbance and gives me directions so that I don't make any mistakes.

'Prior to. Start machine' is incorrect; it should be 'prior to starting the machine'. 'It has me to go' is incorrect; 'it helps me to go through' is correct. 'Can't' should be 'don't' to match the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and verb forms to improve sentence flow and meaning.