Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하며, 불필요한 중복을 피하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적인 흐름을 만들어야 합니다.

例: My favorite machine at home is my robotic vacuum cleaner because it cleans the floor automatically. It saves me a lot of time and effort, so I can focus on studying or relaxing.

提案: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us save time and effort in daily chores, allowing us to rest or do other activities.

提案: 답변이 중간에 끊기고 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 명확하게 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they help me avoid mistakes and use the machine correctly.

提案: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 구체적이고 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps prevent mistakes and makes the process easier.

× it cleans my house actions Leanne automatically

✓ it cleans my house automatically

The phrase 'actions Leanne' is incorrect and seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct phrase should be 'automatically' to describe how the vacuum cleaner works. Present participle 'cleaning' is not needed here; 'cleans' is correct.

× Like studying or relaxing?

✓ like studying or relaxing.

Starting a sentence with 'Like' as a fragment is informal and incomplete. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased. Also, a question mark is incorrect here; a period is appropriate.

× washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

✓ washing machines and sweeping machines are important.

The question is fine, but the student's answer uses singular 'it is important' referring to plural machines. It should be 'they are important' to agree with plural subject.

× Yes, definitely, it is important as it can be.

✓ Yes, definitely, they are as important as they can be.

The subject refers to plural 'washing machines and sweeping machines', so plural verb 'are' should be used. Also, the phrase 'as it can be' should be 'as they can be' to match plural subject.

× It is Accenture to daily life.

✓ It is essential to daily life.

'Accenture' is a mispronunciation or typo. The correct word is 'essential'. The sentence structure is otherwise correct.

× washing machines are stripping machines or helps people to weather radios.

✓ washing machines are cleaning machines and help people to save effort.

'Stripping machines' is incorrect; likely meant 'cleaning machines'. 'Helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural subject 'washing machines'. 'Weather radios' is incorrect; likely misheard phrase. Corrected to 'save effort'.

× Peaceful efforts like sleeping on the map.

✓ They save effort, allowing people to do other things like sleeping or relaxing.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be restructured to convey that machines save effort, enabling other activities.

× And washing by.

✓ And washing by hand.

The phrase is incomplete. Adding 'hand' completes the meaning, indicating washing by hand.

× Because instructions helps me too.

✓ Because instructions help me too.

'Instructions' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' not 'helps'.

× UH-2 radios misleading Lydiane mistakes.

✓ to avoid misleading and making mistakes.

The original phrase is unclear and seems to be misheard. Corrected to a proper phrase indicating purpose of reading instructions.

× Anne. Uh, it is important to read.

✓ Yes, it is important to read them.

Fragment 'Anne.' is unclear. The sentence should be complete and refer to reading instructions.

× it is a censure to read the instructions before using emotion.

✓ it is a pleasure to read the instructions before using a machine.

'Censure' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'pleasure' or 'necessary'. 'Emotion' is incorrect; should be 'a machine'.

× Because it reduces. Our mistakes and misleading.

✓ Because it reduces our mistakes and misunderstandings.

Fragmented sentence; 'misleading' is incorrect here; 'misunderstandings' fits better.

× Uhm anh, it helps more easier to make.

✓ It helps make things easier.

'More easier' is incorrect; 'easier' alone suffices. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× UMMC opposite case.

✓ Otherwise, the opposite would happen.

Original phrase is unclear and incomplete. Rephrased to convey the intended meaning.