Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте лишних слов и старайтесь использовать более точные выражения. Также стоит улучшить структуру ответа, чтобы он был более логичным и понятным.

例: My favourite machine at home is the coffee machine because it makes delicious coffee quickly. Every morning, I just press a button and enjoy a fresh cup. It is very convenient and easy to use, and its compact size fits well in my kitchen.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует избегать стереотипов и использовать более нейтральный и точный язык. Также стоит связать предложения с помощью союзов для лучшей связности.

例: In my opinion, washing machines are very important because they make laundry easier and save time. You just need to press a button, and the machine does the work. On the other hand, sweeping machines are less essential but still helpful for cleaning floors.

提案: Ответ понятен, но можно улучшить грамматику и связность. Используйте более точные слова и связывайте предложения для лучшего потока речи.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they explain how to operate it safely. If I don't understand the instructions, I might use the machine incorrectly. However, some simple machines do not require instructions.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более естественным и плавным, используя разнообразные связки и более точные выражения.

例: I believe it is important to read the instructions because they guide you on how to use the machine properly. Without reading them, you might misuse the device or cause damage. However, simple machines like calculators usually don't need instructions since they are easy to operate.

× My favorite machine at home is a coffee machine because it's really makes delicious an awkward coffees.

✓ My favorite machine at home is a coffee machine because it really makes delicious and aromatic coffee.

The sentence contains incorrect adjective use: 'awkward' is not appropriate to describe coffee; 'an' is incorrectly used before 'awkward coffees' which should be plural or uncountable. Also, 'really makes' should not have 'it's' before it. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× In the morning when you click up.

✓ In the morning, when you wake up,

The phrase 'click up' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'wake up'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected properly to the next idea.

× You take any coffee one and drink it.

✓ You take a cup of coffee and drink it.

The phrase 'any coffee one' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correct expression is 'a cup of coffee' to indicate a serving of coffee.

× So this machine is a very comfortable and cozy to use.

✓ So this machine is very comfortable and cozy to use.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'very comfortable and cozy'. Since these are adjectives describing the machine, 'a' should be omitted.

× It's small and.

✓ It's small and convenient.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding a suitable adjective like 'convenient' completes the thought.

× In my point of view, washing machines are major for the women because it makes their job easier if you need to watch something.

✓ In my point of view, washing machines are important for women because they make their job easier if you need to wash something.

The phrase 'major for the women' is incorrect; 'important for women' is appropriate. Also, 'it makes' should be 'they make' to agree with plural 'washing machines'. 'Watch something' is incorrect; it should be 'wash something'.

× You can just press the bottom and it can do all the things for you.

✓ You can just press the button and it can do everything for you.

'Bottom' is incorrect; the correct word is 'button'. 'All the things' is awkward; 'everything' is more natural.

× Meanwhile sweeping machines are not so. Major. To use.

✓ Meanwhile, sweeping machines are not so important to use.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. It should be a complete sentence with proper word order and punctuation.

× I read the instructions before using a machine becauses it notifies how to use it.

✓ I read the instructions before using a machine because it tells me how to use it.

'Becauses' is a typo and should be 'because'. 'Notifies' is not appropriate here; 'tells me' or 'informs me' is better. Modal verb usage is not directly involved but clarity is improved.

× If I don't know the instruction, I won't be able to use it.

✓ If I don't know the instructions, I won't be able to use it.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps or guidelines.

× However, there are some machines which do not have or do not need instructions.

✓ However, there are some machines that do not have or do not need instructions.

'Which' is less appropriate in restrictive clauses in modern English; 'that' is preferred.

× In my opinion, it is crucial to read the instructions because it informs you what to do.

✓ In my opinion, it is crucial to read the instructions because they inform you what to do.

'Instructions' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'they' instead of 'it'.

× If you don't read the instructions, you might use the machine incorrectly or even damage it.

✓ If you don't read the instructions, you might use the machine incorrectly or even damage it.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× However, some simple machines like Calculator don't usually require instructions because they are easy to use.

✓ However, some simple machines like calculators don't usually require instructions because they are easy to use.

'Calculator' should be plural 'calculators' to match 'some simple machines'. Also, no article is needed before 'calculators' in this context.