Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "much needed upward" which is confusing. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and keep your sentences concise and coherent. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it allows me to do laundry quickly, saving time that I can use for other important activities.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but is somewhat repetitive and contains awkward phrasing like "save a plenty of time" and "as apart from this." Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and choose more natural expressions. Also, be careful with sentence structure to improve clarity.

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and effort, which people can then use for more important tasks in their busy lives.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and connected. Avoid short, fragmented sentences like "And without causing any physical." Use linking words to make your answer smoother and more natural. Also, be careful with word choice, for example, "hazard" could be replaced with "risk."

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and avoid any risk of injury or damage to the equipment.

提案: Your answer has several unclear and incorrect phrases, such as "very perverted" and "physical mental health said that it can cause." Try to use simpler and clearer language to express your ideas. Also, avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your answer is coherent and directly addresses the question.

例: Definitely, it is important to read the instructions before using any machine because it helps prevent accidents and protects both our health and the machine from damage.

× Will washing machine is my favorite one in my home because I can just do my laundry within a few minutes without much needed upward and waste of time, and I can spend that time on useful activities or even focus on important events.

✓ The washing machine is my favorite one in my home because I can just do my laundry within a few minutes without much effort and waste of time, and I can spend that time on useful activities or even focus on important events.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Will' instead of the definite article 'The' before 'washing machine'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Here, 'The washing machine' is correct because it refers to a specific machine in the home.

× Will washing machine is my favorite one in my home because I can just do my laundry within a few minutes without much needed upward and waste of time, and I can spend that time on useful activities or even focus on important events.

✓ The washing machine is my favorite one in my home because I can just do my laundry within a few minutes without much effort and waste of time, and I can spend that time on useful activities or even focus on important events.

The phrase 'much needed upward' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'much effort'. Using the correct noun 'effort' fits the context of saving time and energy.

× Of course both washing machines and sweeping machines are very crucial into this active life schedule as anyone can use these machines and can save a plenty of time and the efforts used and as apart from this they can utilize this save time and effort for more important work.

✓ Of course, both washing machines and sweeping machines are very crucial in this active life schedule as anyone can use these machines and can save plenty of time and effort, and apart from this, they can utilize this saved time and effort for more important work.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' to indicate relevance or importance within a schedule. Also, 'a plenty of time' should be 'plenty of time' without 'a'. Additionally, 'save time and effort' should be 'saved time and effort' to indicate the time and effort that have been saved.

× Yes, I do read the instructions before using any mechanical equipment. It helps us how to use the equipment or machine very easily without any hazard. And without causing any physical. Damage to ourselves, Another property.

✓ Yes, I do read the instructions before using any mechanical equipment. They help us understand how to use the equipment or machine very easily without any hazard and without causing any physical damage to ourselves or other property.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'It helps us how to use' is incorrect; it should be 'They help us understand how to use'. Also, 'physical. Damage' is a sentence fragment and should be combined properly. 'Another property' should be 'other property' to refer to additional possessions.

× Definitely it is very perverted to read the instructions before using any machine. Because it can save us from any physical mental health said that it can cause without knowing how to operate at age safely. Yeah, and I already mentioned it can save us. Damaging oversells underwear machine.

✓ Definitely, it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine because it can save us from any physical or mental harm that can be caused by not knowing how to operate it safely. Yes, and as I already mentioned, it can save us from damaging ourselves or the machine.

The word 'perverted' is incorrect and should be 'important'. The phrase 'physical mental health said that it can cause' is unclear and should be 'physical or mental harm that can be caused'. 'Damaging oversells underwear machine' is nonsensical and should be corrected to 'damaging ourselves or the machine'. The sentence also needs to be combined properly for clarity.