Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "to the loan rates". Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it is very convenient. It allows me to multitask, such as cleaning the house or washing utensils while the clothes are being washed. Additionally, it is a modern, state-of-the-art appliance that saves me a lot of time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life. For example, a washing machine can wash and dry clothes efficiently, allowing people to do other tasks like washing dishes at the same time. These machines save time and effort.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but lacks fluency and clarity. Try to form complete sentences and explain why reading instructions is important, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Definitely, I prefer to read the instructions before using any machine. This helps me understand how to operate the device properly and ensures it functions well. Reading instructions also prevents damage and increases safety.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Focus on clear, complete sentences and provide specific reasons why reading instructions is important, using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any device. For example, washing machines have many new models with different features, such as washing and drying clothes. Reading the guidelines helps users understand how to use these features correctly and safely.

× To be honest my favorite machine at my home is washing machine because it is very convenient and when an individual can do the multi task while to the loan rates such as sweep their home washing utensils.

✓ To be honest, my favorite machine at my home is the washing machine because it is very convenient and an individual can do multiple tasks such as sweeping their home and washing utensils at the same time.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'while to the loan rates' which is unclear and incorrect. The phrase should be 'at the same time' to indicate simultaneous actions. Also, 'multi task' should be 'multiple tasks' to correctly express doing several tasks. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Definitely washing appliances and speak in sweeping devices are essential in detail life.

✓ Definitely, washing appliances and sweeping devices are essential in daily life.

The phrase 'speak in sweeping devices' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping devices'. Also, 'in detail life' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in daily life'. These preposition and word choice errors affect the sentence's meaning.

× For example, washing machine have store, wash and dry the cloth as well as in the meantime one individual can do also the multi task such as.

✓ For example, a washing machine can store, wash, and dry clothes, and at the same time, an individual can also do multiple tasks such as...

The original sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'washing machine have' should be 'a washing machine can', and 'cloth' should be 'clothes'. Also, 'multi task' should be 'multiple tasks'. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× Definitely is. I would prefer to read the guidelines before using any device because it. Gives us the more time to how to use the device and how it functions well because it is very. Good for her store. Read the instructions before using any device.

✓ Definitely, I prefer to read the guidelines before using any device because it gives us more time to learn how to use the device and understand how it functions well. It is very good to read the instructions before using any device.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. Phrases like 'Definitely is.' and 'because it. Gives us the more time' are incomplete or incorrectly punctuated. The correction combines fragments into coherent sentences and corrects awkward phrasing.

× But definitely yes, I think so. It is very essential to read the guidelines before using any device, for example washing machine.

✓ But definitely yes, I think so. It is very essential to read the guidelines before using any device, for example, a washing machine.

The phrase 'for example washing machine' lacks an article before 'washing machine'. Adding 'a' clarifies the noun. Also, a comma after 'for example' improves readability.

× There are so many newest models launched in the market so which washes as well as tries their claws.

✓ There are many new models launched in the market which wash as well as dry clothes.

The phrase 'so many newest models' is incorrect; 'newest' is a superlative and should not be combined with 'so many'. 'Many new models' is correct. Also, 'tries their claws' is a mishearing or typo for 'dry clothes'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.