Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Ngoài ra, nên giới hạn câu trả lời trong 3-5 câu, sử dụng từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it helps me save a lot of time. It cleans clothes quickly and efficiently, which is very convenient for my busy schedule.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Hạn chế lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn.

例: I think washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because they help clean dishes quickly. Nowadays, people use many dishes daily, so washing machines save time and effort.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi phát âm hoặc từ sai.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me avoid mistakes. Also, the manual provides useful tips to operate the machine safely and effectively.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời có tính logic và cụ thể hơn về lý do tại sao bạn nghĩ như vậy.

例: I think it is important to read instructions, but sometimes I skip them because many machines are easy to use nowadays. However, reading instructions can help avoid problems and use the machine properly.

× Now the day the technology is a developing very fast, they are a wire end of machines in our life.

✓ Nowadays, technology is developing very fast; there are a wide range of machines in our life.

The phrase 'Now the day' is incorrect; it should be 'Nowadays' to indicate the current time. 'is a developing' is incorrect; it should be 'is developing' without 'a'. 'they are a wire end of machines' is incorrect; it should be 'there are a wide range of machines'. This corrects the present tense usage and sentence structure.

× And in my house I have washing machine, vacuum machine and so on and but I live a Kim machine.

✓ And in my house, I have a washing machine, a vacuum cleaner, and so on, but I like a Kim machine.

The nouns 'washing machine' and 'vacuum machine' need articles 'a' because they are singular countable nouns. 'vacuum machine' is better expressed as 'vacuum cleaner'. The phrase 'I live a Kim machine' is unclear; assuming it means 'I like a Kim machine'. This corrects singular/plural and article usage.

× Must pick up some reasons.

✓ I must pick some reasons.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. Adding 'I' as the subject and correcting the verb to 'must pick' improves sentence structure.

× In my view, washing machines they are more important and more rougeau be 'cause now the day people are eating a lot of food and they are using more and more dishes.

✓ In my view, washing machines are more important because nowadays people eat a lot of food and use more and more dishes.

The phrase 'washing machines they are' is redundant; 'washing machines are' suffices. 'more rougeau be' is unclear and likely incorrect; replaced with 'more important'. 'now the day' should be 'nowadays'. Corrects plural usage and present tense.

× Using washing machine can have earth cell town and we cannot wait, we don't need to to do any.

✓ Using a washing machine can save water and time; we don't need to do any manual washing.

'have earth cell town' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'save water and time'. 'cannot wait' is incorrect in this context; replaced with 'save time'. Added article 'a' before 'washing machine'. Corrects preposition and phrase usage.

× Of course, yes, because when you read the instructions at the machine, you can do this machine Riley incorrectly.

✓ Of course, yes, because when you read the instructions for the machine, you can avoid using the machine incorrectly.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect; 'for' is appropriate with 'instructions'. 'do this machine Riley incorrectly' is unclear; corrected to 'avoid using the machine incorrectly'. Corrects preposition and sentence clarity.

× And so there are some tips in the introduction to book that can have you use the machine very effectively and sale terms on SO.

✓ And there are some tips in the instruction book that can help you use the machine very effectively and safely.

'introduction to book' should be 'instruction book'. 'can have you use' is incorrect; 'can help you use' is correct. 'sale terms on SO' is unclear; likely 'safely'. Corrects preposition and word choice.

× Maybe yes, but sometimes I don't read instructions when I use the machine because I can I can know how to operate it an easy now is the day.

✓ Maybe yes, but sometimes I don't read instructions when I use the machine because I can easily know how to operate it nowadays.

The phrase 'I can I can know' is repetitive; corrected to 'I can easily know'. 'an easy now is the day' is incorrect; replaced with 'easily' and 'nowadays'. Corrects modal verb usage and adverb placement.

× The that step to use the machine is very easy for everyone.

✓ The steps to use the machine are very easy for everyone.

'The that step' is incorrect; should be 'The steps'. 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'steps'. Corrects singular/plural and present tense agreement.