Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question and provides reasons and an example, which is good. However, the response has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity and naturalness. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine. Since I have many tasks like work and study, I don't have enough time to wash clothes by hand. Therefore, the washing machine helps me save time. For example, I can load my clothes and let the machine run while I do other house chores. This way, I have more time to rest.

提案: Your answer attempts to explain the importance of these machines but contains many unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes that make it difficult to understand. Focus on clear sentence construction and relevant vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid confusing expressions. Keep your answer focused and concise.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save both time and effort. For example, when I am busy, I can load my clothes into the washing machine and let it run while I focus on other tasks. This helps me clean the whole house more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is relevant and provides examples, but the sentences are fragmented and contain grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be careful with word choice to express your ideas clearly and naturally.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely. For example, the washing machine instructions usually mention the maximum load and the types of clothes that can be washed safely.

提案: Your answer shows understanding of the importance of instructions but has unclear and awkward phrasing. Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Make sure your vocabulary fits the context and your sentences are complete.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important because they guide us on how to use machines properly and safely. For instance, instructions tell us the maximum capacity and the types of clothes that are safe to wash, which helps protect both the user and the machine.

× Laugh about machine at home is a washing machine.

✓ My favourite machine at home is a washing machine.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. 'Laugh about machine' is not meaningful. The correct sentence clearly states the subject and predicate in proper order.

× Since I have a lot of task on hand such as working and studying, I end up not having enough time to do washing.

✓ Since I have a lot of tasks on hand such as working and studying, I end up not having enough time to do the washing.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple activities. Also, 'washing' as a noun here needs the definite article 'the' to specify the activity.

× Therefore, having washing machine helps me to do washing.

✓ Therefore, having a washing machine helps me to do the washing.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'washing machine' and 'the' before 'washing' to specify the activity. This clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.

× For example, I put my clothes on washing machine while and peace with other house activities.

✓ For example, I put my clothes in the washing machine while at peace with other house activities.

The phrase 'on washing machine' should be 'in the washing machine' because clothes go inside the machine. 'While and peace' is incorrect; it should be 'while at peace' or 'while doing other house activities'.

× This saves me time and give me enough time to rest.

✓ This saves me time and gives me enough time to rest.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'This'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× Yes, this means I important because it saves time and money.

✓ Yes, this means it is important because it saves time and money.

The original sentence is unclear and missing the verb 'is' after 'means'. Also, 'I important' is incorrect; it should be 'it is important' referring to the machine.

× For instance, if I'm busy that exhibit is working, just load my clothes on washing machine and plug their shipping which into the house while I'm focusing on other activities.

✓ For instance, if I'm busy working, I just load my clothes into the washing machine and plug it in while focusing on other activities.

The original sentence has many unclear phrases like 'that exhibit is working' and 'plug their shipping which into the house'. Corrected to clear, grammatically correct phrases: 'busy working', 'load clothes into the washing machine', and 'plug it in'.

× These saves me time to do the whole house.

✓ This saves me time to do the whole house.

'These' is plural but refers to a singular idea; 'This' is correct. Also, 'saves' agrees with singular subject 'This'.

× Instead I is just the matching tutor.

✓ Instead, I am just the matching tutor.

The verb 'is' is incorrect for the subject 'I'; it should be 'am'. Also, the sentence is unclear but corrected for grammar.

× Yes, because it is important to read instruction to understand how to use the machine and the safety instruction for them.

✓ Yes, because it is important to read the instructions to understand how to use the machine and the safety instructions for it.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and preceded by 'the'. 'For them' is unclear; 'for it' refers to the machine correctly.

× For machine for instance.

✓ For example, for the machine,

The original phrase is incomplete and unclear. Corrected to a proper introductory phrase.

× The instruction of washing machine might be the maximum load of clothes that is allowed on a machine and also the safety instruction sashes type of cloth that is allowed in the machine.

✓ The instructions of the washing machine might include the maximum load of clothes that is allowed and also the safety instructions about the types of cloth that are allowed in the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Sashes type of cloth' is unclear and corrected to 'about the types of cloth'. Subject-verb agreement corrected with 'types of cloth that are allowed'.

× Yes, it is important because instructions guide us on how to use machine and also give instructions on what to do and not to do for the safety of the user and also for safety of machine searches.

✓ Yes, it is important because instructions guide us on how to use the machine and also give instructions on what to do and not to do for the safety of the user and also for the safety of the machine.

Missing 'the' before 'machine'. 'Safety of machine searches' is unclear and corrected to 'safety of the machine'.

× But the maximum capacity that is allowed on machine and what in kind of code that is allowed to put on machine.

✓ They also specify the maximum capacity allowed in the machine and what kind of clothes are allowed to be put in the machine.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Corrected to a complete sentence with proper grammar and clarity.