Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please try to avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, use 'purposes' instead of 'purpose', and avoid repeating words like 'my my'. Also, try to make your sentences more natural and connected by using linking words such as 'and' or 'for example'.

例: My favorite machine at home is my laptop because I use it for many purposes, such as working, studying, and entertainment. For example, I often watch movies or browse the Internet on it. Without my laptop, my daily life would be much more difficult.

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Use complete sentences and linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be careful with word choice, for example, 'washing machine' instead of 'watching machine'.

例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. Without a washing machine, people have to wash clothes by hand, which is less clean, takes more time, and is not convenient at all.

提案: Please improve sentence structure and word choice. Use correct terms like 'washing machine' and 'sweeper or cleaning machine'. Also, try to make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences.

例: I would say it depends on the type of machine. If it is a basic machine that I am familiar with, such as a washing machine or a cleaning machine, I usually don't need to read the instructions because I already know how to use it.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use correct vocabulary and examples. For instance, 'kuka' is unclear; you might mean 'cooker' or 'kettle'. Also, explain why reading instructions is important with clear reasons and examples.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions, especially for machines that could be dangerous. For example, electrical appliances that are not waterproof or could cause electric shocks require careful handling, so reading the instructions helps us use them safely.

× I use it for many purpose.

✓ I use it for many purposes.

The word 'purpose' should be plural 'purposes' because it refers to multiple uses of the laptop.

× It is essential for working, studying an entertainment such as.

✓ It is essential for working, studying, and entertainment such as watching movies or browsing the Internet.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'and' before 'entertainment' and the phrase is incomplete. Also, 'an entertainment' is incorrect; 'entertainment' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× Watching movies or browsing the Internet.

✓ For example, watching movies or browsing the Internet.

This fragment is incomplete and should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete thought.

× Without it, my my daily life would be much more difficult.

✓ Without it, my daily life would be much more difficult.

The repetition of 'my' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'my'.

× Yes, I think they both. Very important.

✓ Yes, I think they are both very important.

The original sentence is fragmented and missing the verb 'are' to connect the subject and complement.

× Because without watching machine.

✓ Because without a washing machine,

The phrase 'watching machine' is incorrect; it should be 'washing machine'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected to the next part.

× People have to wash clothes by hand.

✓ People have to wash clothes by hand,

This sentence is a fragment and should be connected to the previous or next sentence for completeness.

× Which is not clean as machine and take more time and not convenient at all.

✓ which is not as clean as a machine, takes more time, and is not convenient at all.

The sentence is a fragment and needs to be connected properly. Also, 'not clean as machine' should be 'not as clean as a machine'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'takes' instead of 'take'.

× I will say it depends on what kind of machine is it.

✓ I would say it depends on what kind of machine it is.

The sentence structure is incorrect; the correct form is 'what kind of machine it is' without inversion in indirect questions.

× If it is a basic machine that I know, such as. Watching machine or sweep order cleaning machine I would know how to use it so I don't need to read it.

✓ If it is a basic machine that I know, such as a washing machine or a sweeping machine, I would know how to use it so I don't need to read the instructions.

'Watching machine' should be 'washing machine' and 'sweep order cleaning machine' is unclear; 'sweeping machine' is better. Also, the sentence needs commas and the phrase 'read it' should be 'read the instructions' for clarity.

× Yes, I do. So when it comes to something that could harm us. Such as? Kuka or. Something that. Can then just to us such as. The thing that is not waterproof or can have an electric shock.

✓ Yes, I do. So when it comes to something that could harm us, such as a cooker or something that can injure us, like things that are not waterproof or can cause an electric shock, we should read the instructions.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain unclear words like 'Kuka' which likely means 'cooker'. The sentence needs to be combined and clarified for meaning and grammar.