Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“Atmosphere the air conditioner”不清楚且不符合英语习惯，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复和语法错误。

例: My favorite machine at home is the air conditioner because it helps cool the room during hot summers. I dislike the heat as it makes me uncomfortable and sensitive to temperature changes. Additionally, it can provide heating in the cold winter, making it very useful all year round.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子不完整且缺乏连贯性。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: Definitely, I think high-tech machines like washing machines and sweeping machines have become essential in people's daily lives. Washing machines make laundry easier and more convenient, while sweeping machines help keep the house clean efficiently.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的语法。

例: Actually, I rarely read the instructions because most modern machines are easy to use. Usually, they have just one button to operate, so I can start them without any problems.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，且用词不当。建议使用更准确的词汇，完整表达观点，并避免重复。

例: No, I don't think it's very important to read instructions because they are often complicated and hard to understand. Only professional users who want to explore the machine's functions might need to read them.

× Atmosphere the air conditioner my favorite machine because it helped me to cooling the room.

✓ The air conditioner is my favorite machine because it helps me to cool the room.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，且动词形式错误。应补充主语“the air conditioner”，动词用一般现在时“helps”，动词不定式用“to cool”而非“to cooling”。

× because it helped me to cooling the room.

✓ because it helped me to cool the room.

动词不定式后不应使用动名词形式，正确用法是“to cool”而非“to cooling”。

× It makes me very uncomfortable and very sensitive to the temperature.

✓ It makes me very uncomfortable and very sensitive to temperature.

“temperature”前不需要加定冠词“the”，因为这里泛指温度。

× So I think it's very useful to help me cool down and and in the cold winter to also can provide some hitting hitting.

✓ So I think it's very useful to help me cool down, and in the cold winter, it can also provide some heating.

句子中重复使用“and”，且语序混乱。应去掉重复词，调整语序，使句子通顺。

× washing machines at can help people were so close, very convenient and safe many engines.

✓ Washing machines can help people wash clothes; they are very convenient and safe.

原句中“were so close”不合适，应为“wash clothes”；“safe many engines”无意义，应改为“safe”。

× Also the sweeping machines can help people cleaning the house and the.

✓ Also, sweeping machines can help people clean the house.

句子结构不完整，“cleaning”应改为动词原形“clean”，句尾“and the”无意义，应删除。

× Actually, I seldom read the instructions because I think the high technology is not very hard to use.

✓ Actually, I seldom read the instructions because I think high technology is not very hard to use.

“the high technology”中的定冠词“the”不必要，泛指时应去掉。

× It's very simple most of time just one button or give it the electrician.

✓ It's very simple; most of the time, just one button or plug it in.

“give it the electrician”表达错误，应为“plug it in”，且缺少逗号分隔句子。

× It can run, it can run. So we didn't read too much.

✓ It can run by itself, so we don't read the instructions much.

重复“it can run”无意义，且时态应与上下文一致，使用一般现在时。

× Maybe it's just for some very proportional user.

✓ Maybe it's just for some very professional users.

“proportional”用词错误，应为“professional”；“user”应为复数“users”。

× They want to explore the machines how to running, they can, they can investigate this menus,

✓ They want to explore how the machines run; they can investigate these menus,

“how to running”错误，应为“how the machines run”；“this menus”应为“these menus”。

× but to the ordinary.

✓ but for ordinary people,

句子不完整，应补充“people”并调整介词为“for”。