Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'best feed' and 'in a bulk amount'.

例: My favourite machine at home is the treadmill. I like it because it helps me burn calories quickly and stay fit. Moreover, it is easy to use and suitable for all weather conditions.

提案: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'sweeping machines' instead of 'answering machines') and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life. Because they save a lot of time, we can use that time for leisure or other activities. Therefore, these machines make our routine easier and more efficient.

提案: Your answer should be more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why reading instructions is important using linking words like 'because'.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely. This way, I can avoid any damage or accidents.

提案: Your answer should be clearer and more fluent. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and provide a specific example with proper linking words like 'for example' and 'so'.

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because they explain how the machine works. For example, once I ignored the manual and accidentally damaged the device, so now I always read it carefully.

× In my home there is a great gym facilities also.

✓ In my home there are great gym facilities also.

The subject 'gym facilities' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× So in that in from all of that machines.

✓ So among all of those machines.

The phrase 'that machines' is incorrect; 'those machines' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun. Also, 'in from' is incorrect; 'among' fits better here.

× I like to use treadmill a lot because I think it is the best feed to burn calories in a bulk amount.

✓ I like to use the treadmill a lot because I think it is the best way to burn calories in large amounts.

The word 'feed' is incorrect here; 'way' is appropriate. Also, 'in a bulk amount' is awkward; 'in large amounts' is better. 'Treadmill' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Yes, I think washing machines, answering machines are important in every daily routine becaused washing.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and answering machines are important in every daily routine because of washing.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'and' between 'washing machines' and 'answering machines'. Also, 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'.

× With the help of this search machine we can we can reduce our time or we can enhance time in any other ledges ladouceur activities.

✓ With the help of this washing machine, we can reduce our time or we can spend more time on other leisure activities.

'Search machine' is incorrect; it should be 'washing machine'. 'Enhance time' is awkward; 'spend more time' is better. 'Ledges ladouceur' is a mispronunciation of 'leisure'.

× We don't have to spend too much time like doing a washing instead of we can root leisure time.

✓ We don't have to spend too much time doing the washing; instead, we can enjoy leisure time.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Like doing a washing' should be 'doing the washing'. 'Root leisure time' is incorrect; 'enjoy leisure time' is appropriate.

× Yes, I use a instruction to use a machine be 'cause I think that it is important to read.

✓ Yes, I use instructions to use a machine because I think that it is important to read them.

'A instruction' is incorrect; 'instructions' is plural and does not need 'a'. Also, 'be 'cause' should be 'because'. The pronoun 'them' refers to 'instructions'.

× Instruction first becauses something happened after using machine.

✓ Instructions first because something might happen after using the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Becauses' is misspelled 'because'. The sentence needs 'might' to indicate possibility. 'Using machine' needs the article 'the'.

× It will not up to us because we need to do it.

✓ It will not be up to us because we need to do it.

The verb 'be' is missing after 'will not'. The phrase 'will not be up to us' is correct.

× Yes, I think it is very important to read the instruction.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the manual or guidelines.

× As instructions contain a lot of lot of data about the machine that how it will work.

✓ As instructions contain a lot of data about how the machine works.

The phrase 'a lot of lot of' is redundant; only one 'a lot of' is needed. 'That how it will work' is awkward; 'about how the machine works' is better.

× For example, once a have angered the manual, I end up in damaging the device, so it is mandatory to.

✓ For example, once I have ignored the manual, I ended up damaging the device, so it is mandatory to read it.

'A have angered' is incorrect; it should be 'I have ignored'. 'End up in damaging' should be 'ended up damaging'. The sentence is incomplete; 'so it is mandatory to read it' completes the thought.