Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum robot because it helps me clean the floor efficiently. Moreover, it is powered by artificial intelligence, which makes it very useful and convenient.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and clearer expression. Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important nowadays. In modern society, both men and women have busy schedules, so these machines save time and make daily chores easier. Therefore, they have become basic necessities in our lives.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid short, fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions or manual provided by the company before using a machine. This helps me understand how to operate it properly and ensures safe usage.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your response coherent. Be specific about why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions before using a machine. I always carefully read the manual provided by the company because it helps me understand how to use the machine correctly and makes the process easier.

× My favorite machine in my home is a vacuum robot because it helped me load to vacuum clean and more for my floor, and that's very useful and is powered by artificial intelligence.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is a vacuum robot because it helps me to vacuum clean and more for my floor, and that's very useful and is powered by artificial intelligence.

The verb 'helped' is incorrectly used in past tense here; the present tense 'helps' is appropriate because the student is describing a current fact. Also, 'load to vacuum clean' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me to vacuum clean'. Use present tense for habitual actions or facts.

× There's my favorite.

✓ That's my favorite.

The phrase 'There's my favorite' is incorrect; 'That's my favorite' is the correct expression to indicate preference. 'There is' is used to indicate existence, not possession or preference.

× Yes, now days are washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because in this very.

✓ Yes, nowadays washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because in this very.

The phrase 'now days are' is incorrect; 'nowadays' is a single word and does not require 'are'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and awkward; 'nowadays' should be used as an adverb without 'are'.

× Yes, now days are washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because in this very.

✓ Yes, nowadays washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in today's society.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It should be restructured to clearly express the idea that washing and sweeping machines are important in modern society.

× women and men's are equally they have not much time to wash their clothes and do other things.

✓ women and men equally do not have much time to wash their clothes and do other things.

The phrase 'women and men's are equally they have not much time' is incorrect. 'Men's' is possessive and unnecessary here. The correct form is 'women and men equally do not have much time'. Also, 'equally' should be placed properly to modify the verb.

× Here machines are very basic necessities into his life.

✓ These machines are very basic necessities in their lives.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate something existing within a context. Also, 'his life' should be 'their lives' to match plural subject 'machines' and plural people.

× Yes, obviously I always read instructions or manual given by the company for the machine.

✓ Yes, obviously I always read the instructions or manual given by the company for the machine.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'instructions' and 'manual' because they refer to specific items related to the machine.

× It's very helpful to how to use and how it works.

✓ It's very helpful to know how to use it and how it works.

The phrase 'helpful to how to use' is incorrect. The verb 'know' is needed after 'helpful to' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× Yeah, it is the basic sense. To use it.

✓ Yeah, it is basic sense to use it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be combined into one sentence for clarity.

× Yes, obviously it is important to read the instructions given on a machine before to use it.

✓ Yes, obviously it is important to read the instructions given on a machine before using it.

The phrase 'before to use it' is incorrect; the gerund form 'before using it' is correct after 'before'.

× I always read properly full interruptions which is given by the company how to use the machine or something and it is very helpful and easy to use after read the instructions.

✓ I always properly read the full instructions given by the company on how to use the machine, and it is very helpful and easy to use after reading the instructions.

The word 'interruptions' is incorrect; it should be 'instructions'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs reordering for clarity. 'Properly' should come before 'read'. 'After read' should be 'after reading'.