Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and coherent. Avoid sentence fragments and unclear phrases like 'In daily races'. Try to form complete sentences and explain clearly why you like the treadmill. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is the treadmill, which my father bought for me to help stay fit and physically active. I use it daily to improve my stamina and health.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'sweeping miss inside important'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and be more specific about why these machines are important.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help keep our homes neat and clean. A clean environment is essential for good health, so I think everyone should have these machines.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use clearer sentence structures. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely. Moreover, if any problem occurs, the instructions often provide solutions.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use proper sentence structure. Explain why reading instructions is important, focusing on safety and precautions, and use linking words to connect your points.

例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important because it ensures customer safety. It also informs users about necessary precautions to avoid any problems while using the machine.

× My favorite machine is treadmill in my home which my father got me to stay fit and.

✓ My favorite machine is the treadmill in my home which my father got me to stay fit and

The sentence misses the definite article 'the' before 'treadmill' and the word 'treadmill' is singular and should be preceded by 'the' to specify the machine. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion or correction.

× Physically active. In daily races.

✓ to stay physically active in daily routines.

The original fragment 'Physically active. In daily races.' is incomplete and lacks proper sentence structure. It should be combined into a complete sentence to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes I think washing machines and sweeping miss inside important because personally I feel though home I stay in should be neat and clean.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because personally I feel the home I stay in should be neat and clean.

The phrase 'sweeping miss inside' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping machines'. Also, 'though home' should be 'the home'. The plural form 'machines' is needed and the sentence needs proper articles.

× Should have a clean environment so I prefer everyone to have washing machines and sweeping Masons.

✓ It should have a clean environment, so I prefer everyone to have washing machines and sweeping machines.

The sentence lacks a subject at the beginning and 'sweeping Masons' is a typo; it should be 'sweeping machines'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I do read the instructions before using a machine because that is very important in case you face any problem and you don't know what's the solution is there.

✓ Yes, I do read the instructions before using a machine because that is very important in case you face any problem and you don't know what the solution is.

The phrase 'what's the solution is there' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'what the solution is' to maintain proper sentence structure.

× If you have read the instruction, there might be a solution in it.

✓ If you have read the instructions, there might be a solution in them.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps, and 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun.

× So I insured to ensure everyone to read instructions before using a machine.

✓ So I ensure everyone reads the instructions before using a machine.

The phrase 'I insured to ensure' is incorrect and redundant. 'Insured' is past tense of 'insure' (to guarantee), but here 'ensure' (to make sure) is appropriate. Also, 'everyone to read' should be 'everyone reads' for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it is only for the customer safety and the precautions they should take before if there is any problem.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it is only for customer safety and the precautions they should take beforehand if there is any problem.

The phrase 'for the customer safety' should be 'for customer safety' without 'the'. Also, 'before if there is any problem' is awkward; 'beforehand if there is any problem' or 'before if there is any problem' is better. The preposition usage needs correction for clarity.