Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and concise by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: My favourite machine at home is definitely my cell phone because I use it for many tasks. For example, I make grocery lists and manage my daily schedule on it, which makes my life much easier.

提案: Focus on clarity and avoid unclear or incomplete sentences. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are important because washing machines save time by cleaning clothes efficiently, and sweeping machines help keep the house clean with less effort.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide a clear reason and example to support your answer.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because they help me understand how to operate it properly. For instance, without reading the washing machine instructions, I might not know which settings to choose.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct by organizing your ideas clearly and using linking words. Provide a specific example to illustrate your point.

例: Yes, it is very important to read instructions because, for example, when using a washing machine, reading the instructions helps avoid confusion with the many buttons and settings.

× Without my cell phone, I don't think so.

✓ Without my cell phone, I don't think I can survive even for a minute.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a main verb and object to complete the thought. Adding 'I can survive even for a minute' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Because I have I have to do everything on my phone from small things just like making a list on my for my grocery 2 doing any kind of task.

✓ Because I have to do everything on my phone, from small things like making a grocery list to doing any kind of task.

The original sentence is repetitive and contains unclear phrases such as 'my for my grocery 2 doing'. The correction removes repetition and clarifies the meaning by restructuring the sentence properly.

× sweeping machine helpers to uh to reuse the clothes which is not able which which are not able to prefer to veer.

✓ sweeping machines help to clean the clothes which are not able to be washed.

The original sentence has singular/plural inconsistency ('sweeping machine helpers') and unclear wording ('prefer to veer'). The correction uses plural 'machines' and corrects the verb agreement and meaning for clarity.

× instructions are made to be take very convenient so that we can use a machine without any hinder

✓ instructions are made to be very convenient so that we can use a machine without any hindrance

The phrase 'to be take very convenient' is incorrect; 'to be very convenient' is correct. Also, 'without any hinder' should be 'without any hindrance' as 'hinder' is a verb, while 'hindrance' is the noun needed here.

× for example of washing for example a washing machine without reading instructions we cannot use a washing machine with a click.

✓ For example, without reading the instructions, we cannot use a washing machine with just a click.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured. The correction improves clarity and flow by removing redundancy and adding necessary commas.

× If we are using a their instructions while before using the washing machine then we will never get confused between the lot of switches and buttons that installed in a washing machine.

✓ If we use the instructions before using the washing machine, then we will never get confused by the many switches and buttons installed in the washing machine.

The original sentence misuses pronouns ('a their instructions') and has awkward phrasing ('between the lot of switches'). The correction fixes pronoun use and improves clarity and grammar.