Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "in this new Derrick scenario" and "becauses". Try to use simpler, more natural expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly. For example, you can say "My favourite machine at home is the television because it provides both information and entertainment."

例: My favourite machine at home is the television because it provides both information and entertainment. It keeps me updated on world news and also offers various shows that I enjoy watching.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some repetition and grammatical mistakes, such as "becauses" and "to wash the clothes, to wash the carpets and everything." Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise. For example, you can say "Yes, washing and sweeping machines are essential because they make household chores much easier and more efficient."

例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are essential because they make household chores much easier and more efficient. For instance, washing machines save time when cleaning clothes, and sweeping machines help keep the house tidy with less effort.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, which is good. However, some phrases are awkward, such as "maximum time" and "feel more convenient." Also, watch for grammar errors like "ensure the machine work of efficiently." Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar. For example, "I usually read the instructions carefully before using a machine to ensure I operate it correctly and avoid damage."

例: I usually read the instructions carefully before using a machine to ensure I operate it correctly and avoid damage. For example, when I bought a new vacuum cleaner, I read the manual thoroughly to understand how to use it safely and effectively.

提案: Your answer shows understanding of the importance of instructions but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "machine can be complicated or potential dangerous" and "Does I always make sure." Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentences. For example, "Yes, I believe it is essential to read instructions because machines can be complicated or potentially dangerous. Reading the manual helps prevent damage and injuries."

例: Yes, I believe it is essential to read instructions because machines can be complicated or potentially dangerous. Reading the manual helps me avoid damaging the device and prevents accidents while using new equipment.

× Well, in this new Derrick scenario in my home there are lot of technical machines but my favorite one is television becauses it is a source of infotainment.

✓ Well, in this new Derrick scenario in my home there are lots of technical machines but my favorite one is the television because it is a source of infotainment.

The phrase 'there are lot of technical machines' is incorrect because 'lot' should be pluralized as 'lots' when referring to many items. Also, 'television' as a singular countable noun requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item. Additionally, 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× It not only provide information regarding the worldwide but also entertain me.

✓ It not only provides information regarding the world but also entertains me.

The verbs 'provide' and 'entertain' need to agree with the singular subject 'It', so they should be in the third person singular form 'provides' and 'entertains'. Also, 'worldwide' is an adjective or adverb, but here the noun 'world' is appropriate. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and correct word usage.

× Definitely, I think so, becauses with the washing machine it is really easy.

✓ Definitely, I think so, because with the washing machine it is really easy.

The word 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. Correct spelling is essential for clarity and correctness.

× It becomes really easy for everyone to do household things, to wash the clothes, to wash the carpets and everything.

✓ It becomes really easy for everyone to do household chores, to wash clothes, to wash carpets and everything.

The phrase 'household things' is vague and uncountable; 'household chores' is more appropriate. Also, 'the clothes' and 'the carpets' are better without 'the' when speaking generally. This correction improves naturalness and grammatical accuracy.

× Therefore sweeping as well as washing machine is essential.

✓ Therefore, sweeping as well as washing machines are essential.

The phrase 'washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping' (implying sweeping machines). Also, the verb should be plural 'are' to agree with the compound subject. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and correct pluralization.

× Yeah, maximum time.

✓ Yeah, most of the time.

The phrase 'maximum time' is incorrect in this context; the correct expression is 'most of the time' to indicate frequency. This correction improves idiomatic usage.

× I prefer to read the instruction carefully before using a machine.

✓ I prefer to read the instructions carefully before using a machine.

The noun 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple guidelines or steps. This correction ensures correct noun number.

× This helps me feel more convenient, confident and ensure the machine work of efficiently.

✓ This helps me feel more comfortable, confident and ensures the machine works efficiently.

The adjective 'convenient' is incorrectly used to describe a feeling; 'comfortable' is appropriate. Also, 'ensure' should be 'ensures' to agree with singular subject 'This'. 'Work of efficiently' is incorrect; it should be 'works efficiently'. These corrections improve word choice and subject-verb agreement.

× Yeah, I yes, I believe it is really essential to read the instructions before using any machine.

✓ Yeah, yes, I believe it is really essential to read the instructions before using any machine.

The phrase 'I yes, I' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'Yeah, yes, I'. This correction improves sentence fluency.

× For instance, machine can be complicated or potential dangerous, so reading the instruction helps in preventing damage to a device and avoid serious injuries.

✓ For instance, a machine can be complicated or potentially dangerous, so reading the instructions helps prevent damage to a device and avoid serious injuries.

The noun 'machine' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'Potential' should be the adverb 'potentially' to modify 'dangerous'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Helps in preventing' is better as 'helps prevent' for conciseness. These corrections improve article use, word form, and verb usage.

× Does I always make sure to carefully read the manual before operating any new equipment.

✓ I always make sure to carefully read the manual before operating any new equipment.

The auxiliary 'Does' is incorrectly used with the subject 'I' in a declarative sentence. Removing 'Does' corrects the sentence structure. This correction fixes subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.