Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и логичным. Избегайте лишних слов и неясных выражений, таких как "Am I home?" и "Lee that interestingly". Также старайтесь использовать связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями. Уточните, почему именно стиральная машина для вас самая полезная, и избегайте повторений.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I use it two or three times a week. It saves me a lot of time and effort by keeping my clothes clean and fresh. Interestingly, many people prefer the fridge or cooker, but for me, the washing machine is the most important.

提案: Ответ хороший, но требует улучшения в грамматике и связности. Используйте правильные артикли и согласование чисел (например, "washing machines and sweeping machines"). Добавьте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте, почему именно эти машины важны.

例: I believe that washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and energy when doing daily chores. Moreover, they help us keep our clothes and home clean, which is essential for maintaining a hygienic living environment.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и неясные выражения, например, "cougar" вместо "cooker". Следует использовать правильные слова и грамматические конструкции. Также стоит структурировать ответ, начиная с общего утверждения, затем объясняя причину. Избегайте неясных фраз, таких как "anybody who used welcome".

例: It depends on the machine. For devices like washing machines or fridges, which have not changed much in the past ten years, I usually do not read the instructions because they are user-friendly.

提案: Ответ неполный и содержит повторения и паузы. Следует завершить мысль и использовать более связный и полный ответ. Также избегайте повторений и неясных выражений. Объясните, в каких случаях важно читать инструкции и почему.

例: I think it depends on the machine. For example, I rarely read instructions for cookers or fridges because they have not changed much and are user-friendly. However, I always read instructions for new or complex machines to ensure I use them correctly.

× I use it twice, two or three times a week and it saves me lots of time and effort keeping my clothes fresh and clean and interesting.

✓ I use it two or three times a week and it saves me lots of time and effort keeping my clothes fresh and clean and interesting.

The phrase 'I use it twice, two or three times a week' is redundant and awkward. 'Twice' and 'two or three times' both indicate frequency, so only one should be used. The correction removes 'twice' to avoid redundancy and improve clarity.

× I believe that washing machine and sweeping machine are very important because they save a lot of energy and time when doing a daily chores.

✓ I believe that washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of energy and time when doing daily chores.

The nouns 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' should be plural ('washing machines' and 'sweeping machines') because the sentence refers to these machines in general. Also, 'a daily chores' is incorrect; 'chores' is plural and does not need 'a'. The correction fixes these pluralization errors.

× Also they keep help us to keep clothes clean and this is important for keeping hygienic living environment.

✓ Also, they help us keep clothes clean and this is important for maintaining a hygienic living environment.

The phrase 'keep help us to keep' is incorrect; 'help us keep' is the correct form. Also, 'keeping hygienic living environment' is awkward; 'maintaining a hygienic living environment' is more natural. The correction improves preposition and verb usage for clarity.

× That depends if we are talking about washing machine, fridge or cougar which hardly changed during past 10 years.

✓ That depends if we are talking about the washing machine, fridge, or cooker, which has hardly changed during the past 10 years.

The sentence lacks definite articles before 'washing machine' and 'fridge'. 'Cougar' is likely a mishearing of 'cooker'. Also, 'which hardly changed' should be 'which has hardly changed' to use the present perfect tense correctly. The correction addresses pronoun and article usage and corrects the noun and verb tense.

× Usually they are user friendly and anybody who used welcome.

✓ Usually, they are user friendly and anybody who uses them is welcome to do so.

The phrase 'anybody who used welcome' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be 'anybody who uses them is welcome to do so' to express that anyone who uses the machines is welcome. The correction clarifies pronoun reference and verb usage.

× It depends on the machine. For example, if we talk about cooker or fridge, I would hardly. Uh, I would hardly. You read their instructions because they haven't changed much for the last 10 years and they're user friendly.

✓ It depends on the machine. For example, if we talk about a cooker or fridge, I would hardly read their instructions because they haven't changed much in the last 10 years and they're user friendly.

The sentence is fragmented and contains repeated phrases. 'I would hardly. Uh, I would hardly. You read their instructions' is incorrect. It should be 'I would hardly read their instructions'. Also, 'cooker or fridge' needs an article 'a'. The correction fixes sentence structure and pronoun usage.