Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时有重复词汇（如“I I”），影响流畅性。建议避免重复，简洁表达观点，并适当使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe I am a patient person because I am usually tolerant and understanding towards others. For example, when my friends eat slower than me, I don't mind waiting patiently. I think patience helps avoid conflicts and solve problems effectively.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且用词重复（如“like”多次出现）。建议简化句子结构，明确表达原因，并使用恰当词汇。

例: I feel impatient when I have to complete a large number of tests within a limited time. This situation makes me frustrated and stressed, especially when I have too much work to do.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇（如“and and”），表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，使用连接词使逻辑更清楚，并避免重复。

例: I am okay with doing something for a long time because I believe good results require patience and effort. You need to invest time and energy to achieve success.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误（"patients"应为"patience"），且句子结构略显简单。建议注意拼写，使用更丰富的词汇和连接词使表达更自然。

例: Although I don't have a job yet, being a university student requires a great deal of patience. We have many assignments and classes, so patience helps me stay organized and focused on my studies.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰（如“something weighs something”），建议使用更准确的表达，避免口语化词汇，增强逻辑连贯性。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to get very frustrated when waiting for others, but now I understand that waiting is unavoidable. Therefore, I try to stay calm and use the time productively.

× If I find one of my friends eating dinner much slower than me, I don't mind waiting patiently for them.

✓ If I find one of my friends eating dinner much slower than I do, I don't mind waiting patiently for them.

这里涉及主格和宾格的使用问题，'than me'应改为'than I do'，因为比较结构中需要主格和动词。

× I like to say there is time that I will feel impatient, like if you have to like finish mountains of tests and just a limited amount of time.

✓ I would say there are times when I feel impatient, like if you have to finish mountains of tests in a limited amount of time.

这里'modal verb usage'错误，'I like to say'不符合表达习惯，应使用'I would say'表示假设或倾向；'there is time'应为'there are times'，符合复数形式。

× It just really gets me frustrating and that's the moment I broke down and just feel impatient about my job.

✓ It just really frustrates me, and that's the moment I break down and feel impatient about my job.

'gets me frustrating'用法错误，应为'frustrates me'；'broke down'时态不对，应为一般现在时'break down'，因为前文时态为一般现在时。

× I'm OK with that situation because I have been patient towards waiting and I think that the good things always waste and and also the good things, you have to pay attention, you have to invest time and energy into it to actually get a good result.

✓ I'm OK with that situation because I have been patient while waiting, and I think that good things always take time, and also for good things, you have to pay attention and invest time and energy into them to actually get good results.

'waste'用词错误，应为'take time'；'patient towards waiting'表达不自然，应为'patient while waiting'；句子结构需调整以符合语法和表达习惯。

× However, being a student definitely requires a lot of patience because we have many assignments to complete, our numerous classes to attend.

✓ However, being a student definitely requires a lot of patience because we have many assignments to complete and numerous classes to attend.

原句中'our numerous classes'中'our'多余且不自然，应去掉；并且连接词使用不当，应使用'and'连接两个并列成分。

× I think patients can help us be more organized and more focused into dealing with those things.

✓ I think patience can help us be more organized and more focused in dealing with those things.

'patients'应为'patience'，名词形式错误；'focused into'应为'focused in'，介词使用错误。

× Yes, I believe I have become a much more patient person compared when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I believe I have become a much more patient person compared to when I was a child.

'compared when'缺少介词'to'，应为'compared to'，这是固定搭配。

× In the past, I used to get like a very frustrated whenever I had to wait for others.

✓ In the past, I used to get very frustrated whenever I had to wait for others.

'get like a very frustrated'结构错误，'like'不应出现，'frustrated'是形容词，直接修饰主语。

× But now I understand that something weighs something.

✓ But now I understand that everything has its value.

原句表达不清且语法错误，'something weighs something'不符合英语表达习惯，建议改为更自然的表达。