Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，且句子结构较为混乱。建议注意主谓一致，避免重复表达，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I am not a very patient person. Sometimes, when I do my homework, I can be patient, but when I have a lot of work and feel stressed, I tend to become irritable.

提案: 回答内容较为具体，但存在语法错误和重复词汇。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并注意单复数和时态的正确使用。

例: The fast pace of life and heavy stress make me feel impatient. Because I don't have enough time to relax, I often feel irritable and rush through tasks.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。建议简化句子，明确表达感受，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I feel irritable and impatient when I have to do something for a long time because it feels lonely and I lose motivation.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议避免重复词汇，使用更准确的表达，并注意句子结构。

例: Yes, my major is law, so my job requires a lot of patience and good time management. If I become impatient, I might make many mistakes.

提案: 回答内容较好，但语法和表达仍需改进。建议注意时态一致，使用更自然的表达方式，并简化句子。

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now. As a child, I couldn't calm down and always wanted to play games or do fun things, but now I have to be patient.

× No, I think I'm not a totally patient people and sometimes when I write my homework I can be patient, but at sometimes when I have a lot of work and my pressure is heavy, I will be irritable in working time.

✓ No, I think I'm not a totally patient person and sometimes when I do my homework I can be patient, but sometimes when I have a lot of work and my pressure is heavy, I will be irritable during working time.

people是复数，表示“人们”，这里需要用单数person表示“一个人”。另外，write my homework不符合习惯表达，应改为do my homework。'at sometimes'应改为'sometimes'，'in working time'应改为'during working time'。

× No, I think I'm not a totally patient people and sometimes when I write my homework I can be patient, but at sometimes when I have a lot of work and my pressure is heavy, I will be irritable in working time.

✓ No, I think I'm not a totally patient person and sometimes when I do my homework I can be patient, but sometimes when I have a lot of work and my pressure is heavy, I will be irritable during working time.

介词使用错误，'at sometimes'应为'sometimes'，'in working time'应为'during working time'，表示在工作时间内。

× I think it's a heavy life, stress and fast pace of daily life. It always make me feel stressed and and do everything quickly.

✓ I think it's a heavy life, stress, and a fast pace of daily life. It always makes me feel stressed and makes me do everything quickly.

stress是不可数名词，前面不需要冠词，fast pace前应加冠词a。动词make主语是It，单数，动词应加s变为makes。

× It always make me feel stressed and and do everything quickly.

✓ It always makes me feel stressed and makes me do everything quickly.

主语It是第三人称单数，谓语动词make应加s变为makes。

× I don't have myself time to get relaxation so I'll be irritable and impatient.

✓ I don't have time for myself to get relaxation so I'll be irritable and impatient.

myself用法错误，应该用time for myself表示“属于我自己的时间”。

× When I need to do something for a long time, I would feel irritable and impatient because it's too isolated and don't have any motivation and patience.

✓ When I need to do something for a long time, I would feel irritable and impatient because it's too isolating and I don't have any motivation or patience.

isolated用作形容词不合适，应该用现在分词isolating表示使人感到孤立。缺少主语I导致动词don't前缺少主语。and改为or更符合语境。

× It's not passionate, I think it's.

✓ I think it's not passionate.

句子结构混乱，应该将主语和谓语放在一起，表达清晰。

× Yes, my major is law so my job is about law and to do this job you must be patient, patience and have time schedule because if you are irritable or impatient you will get a lot of wrong.

✓ Yes, my major is law so my job is about law and to do this job you must be patient, have patience and have a time schedule because if you are irritable or impatient you will make a lot of mistakes.

patience是不可数名词，不能和形容词patient并列使用，应该用have patience。time schedule前应加冠词a。get a lot of wrong表达错误，应改为make a lot of mistakes。

× Yes, absolutely, because when I was a child I don't have patience because I can't calm down and I always want to play some games or have some funny things what I interested.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because when I was a child I didn't have patience because I couldn't calm down and I always wanted to play some games or have some fun things that I was interested in.

描述过去时态，动词应使用过去式didn't have, couldn't, wanted。'funny things'应改为'fun things'表示有趣的事物。关系代词what用法错误，应改为that I was interested in。

× But at this time I must be patient.

✓ But now I must be patient.

表达现在时，'at this time'不自然，改为now更符合口语表达。