Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding unclear phrases like 'follow my piracy'. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get frustrated easily, especially when small things annoy me, such as when someone enters my room without knocking. However, I am aware of this and I am trying to be more patient and calm in my daily life.

提案: Your answer is quite clear and relevant. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Also, avoid listing too many examples without linking them.

例: Many things make me feel impatient, such as loud noises and bad weather like hot, humid days or heavy rain. Moreover, I especially get impatient when people speak very slowly or show disrespect, as it wastes time and feels inconsiderate.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and clear. To improve, try to use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and add a bit more specific detail to enrich your response.

例: If I am doing something I really enjoy, I can focus for a long time and even feel excited. However, if the task is boring or difficult, I tend to lose concentration quickly and become impatient, which makes me feel frustrated. For example, when I have to study subjects I don't like, it's hard to stay motivated for long periods.

提案: Please correct grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'tough tough stop'. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition.

例: At the moment, I don't have a job because I am a student. However, being patient is very important since I need to study for about seven hours every day. This requires a lot of concentration and the ability to stay focused, especially when I have to understand difficult concepts or solve challenging problems, such as when I encounter a tough topic.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some grammar errors and unclear phrases like 'maintain my composture'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific in your explanation.

例: I definitely think I am more patient now than when I was a child. For instance, I used to get frustrated quickly when someone ignored me, but these days I try to maintain my composure and think carefully before responding. This change happened because I realized that being patient helps me deal with difficult situations better.

× I tend to become frustrated easily, especially when small things annoy me like when someone does not before entering my room.

✓ I tend to become frustrated easily, especially when small things annoy me like when someone does not knock before entering my room.

The original sentence is missing a verb after 'does not'. The correct past participle form 'knock' is needed to complete the meaning. Without the verb, the sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× I follow my piracy a lot, so much in situations make me lose my temper quickly.

✓ I follow my principles a lot, so many situations make me lose my temper quickly.

The phrase 'follow my piracy' is incorrect; likely a mishearing or typo for 'follow my principles'. Also, 'so much in situations' is incorrect; it should be 'so many situations' to correctly refer to countable situations.

× This requires a lot of concentration and ability to stay focus, especially when I have to understand difficult concept or solve challenging problems, for example when I encounter a tough tough stop.

✓ This requires a lot of concentration and the ability to stay focused, especially when I have to understand difficult concepts or solve challenging problems, for example when I encounter a tough tough spot.

The phrase 'stay focus' should be 'stay focused' to use the correct adjective form. 'Difficult concept' should be plural 'difficult concepts' to match the context. 'Tough tough stop' seems to be a typo and should be 'tough tough spot' or simply 'tough spot'.

× I definitely think I am more patient now than when I was a child. For instance, I used to get frustrated very quickly whenever someone ignored me, but these days I try to maintain my composture and think carefully before responding.

✓ I definitely think I am more patient now than when I was a child. For instance, I used to get frustrated very quickly whenever someone ignored me, but these days I try to maintain my composure and think carefully before responding.

The word 'composture' is a misspelling of 'composure'. Correct spelling is important for clarity and professionalism.

× This change has come about because I realized that being patient not only helped me deal with difficult situation.

✓ This change has come about because I realized that being patient not only helps me deal with difficult situations.

The sentence is incomplete and has tense inconsistency. 'Helped' should be 'helps' to maintain present tense consistency. Also, 'difficult situation' should be plural 'difficult situations' to be grammatically correct.