Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为直接，但表达略显简单，缺少连接词和具体细节。建议增加一些具体情境描述，并使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: To be honest, I'm not a very patient person because I often feel anxious when waiting. For example, I tend to want to finish tasks quickly, which sometimes makes me rush and feel stressed.

提案: 回答内容具体，但语法有误，且连接词使用不够自然。建议注意语法准确性，并使用更丰富的连接词来增强连贯性。

例: Several things make me feel impatient. For instance, when I'm waiting for important results like exam scores or job application outcomes, I find it hard to stay calm. Moreover, standing in long queues also tests my patience.

提案: 表达存在语法错误，句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并增加连接词使表达更连贯。

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I often find it difficult to stay motivated because the end seems far away. Sometimes, I even feel like giving up halfway, as long-term tasks can be really hard and frustrating.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并且用更完整的句子表达观点。

例: I'm not working at the moment, but since I am majoring in nursing, I hope to become a nurse in the future. Nursing definitely requires a lot of patience when dealing with patients and their families.

提案: 回答表达了对比，但存在语法错误和重复。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意语法和重复问题。

例: Absolutely. When I was young, I was anxious and wanted to know things immediately. However, now I am calmer and more patient because I understand that some things just take time.

× There are many things can make my feel impatient, for example when I'm waiting for an important result, such as my exam scores or the job application outcomes.

✓ There are many things that can make me feel impatient, for example when I'm waiting for an important result, such as my exam scores or the job application outcomes.

这里'my feel'中的'my'是错误的代词形式，应该用宾格'me'。此外，缺少关系代词'that'引导定语从句。建议使用'me'代替'my'，并加上'that'。

× I may feel a little bit difficult to reach the destination and it's hard to see the end.

✓ I may find it a little bit difficult to reach the destination and it's hard to see the end.

原句中'see the end'表达不自然，且'difficult'需要有形式主语'it'和动词'find'搭配。建议改为'I may find it a little bit difficult'。

× I even may give up halfway because the long term things is really a hard and frustrating.

✓ I even may give up halfway because long-term things are really hard and frustrating.

'things'是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式'are'，而不是'is'。此外，'a hard and frustrating'缺少名词，且'hard'和'frustrating'应为形容词修饰名词。建议去掉冠词'a'，并调整形容词使用。

× Nurse absolutely requires a lot of patients to to patients and their family members.

✓ Nurses absolutely require a lot of patience to patients and their family members.

'Nurse'应为复数'nurses'，因为泛指职业群体。'patients'应为'patience'（耐心），这里是名词。重复了'to'。建议改为'Nurses absolutely require a lot of patience to patients and their family members.'。

× But now I'm I'm more calm and patient I know that it needs only time.

✓ But now I'm more calm and patient. I know that it only needs time.

'needs only time'中'only'位置不当，通常放在动词后面。句子缺少句号导致结构混乱。建议调整为'I know that it only needs time.'并分句。